Reviews for when the sky burns |
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I'M FIRIN' MAH LAHZOR chapter 1 . 12/14/2011 erm... is this suposed to be fantasy or sci-fi warhammer? the crosbow confused me |
Kelthemos of Nismon chapter 1 . 1/2/2011 Blocky block of block text is blocky. |
IronSpockMaster chapter 1 . 9/2/2010 Interesting beginning. i'm wondering where you'll take this. surprise me!:) you do need to use more puunctuation, because it is very difficult to read, and more paragraph breaks. the change between peace and the fight took me by surprise, i hadn't even registered he was in a fight until well in because it was the same paragraph and it really confused me. |
Anonymous chapter 1 . 6/26/2010 Learn how to write the English language. |