amazing!~~~~

You have a wonderful writing style! You spin your words just beautifully. I'm enamored. :)

"Avaritia" was evil and sweet at the same time. Aww, Soubi, stop hogging him all to yourself! Though I can't blame him. _ "Ira" was one of my favorites. His voicemails were so cute. D'aww! I wish you could turn that one into a longer fic and describe what happens next. I would very much like to read something like that! "Superbia" was adorable as well. My other favorite. :) Soubi knows allll too well what he's doing, doesn't he? Hee hee.

And "Luxuria" was just delicious and tempting. You write in a way that makes me feel exactly what's going on. I could feel my pulse start to race, too. I love how convincingly you write, and you do so in not too many words (unlike my verbose self). It's just perfectly described.

I can't wait to read more from you. _

haa~h lovely ;w;

Heeeey )

I realy liked your fic! very cute *-*

Congratulations!

Mafe Ly

i like this i esp. like how the story esculates as each chap. unfolds-nice job!

You wrote this very skillfully! It's deep and rich without being graphic. Your misty way of writing about their time together really added to your style.

The one grammar point I'd like to make concerns "its" vs "it's". "It's" only stands for "it is". Nothing else. "Its" is possesive- ex. "Ritsuka's body moves on it's own accord..." since "it is" doesn't make sense there, you're showing possession. That means use "its" instead. Unfortunately, that's backwards of other possession words (Soubi's glasses, Ritsuka's ears, etc). Just one of those annoying English confusions I guess.

Anyway, thanks for writing! Keep it up!

i have no questions,no critiques and (maybe unfortunately) no constructive criticism, because this work has left me speechless. Just a wide smile and bright, sparkling eyes, because reading this has transformed my frightening bad day. Thank you.