Too cute! X-D

Haha, that was cute!

Cute story

I wonder if Boba ever tried to steal that jetpack

I really love your fanfics about these guys. You keep them in-character for the most part, and I really like how you didn't pair up Zam and Jango romantically. (I hate it when people do that)

Very cute & fluffy :) Oh Boba, it's too bad that you copying your dad means you grow up to be a complete nut-job...

Ah how sweet! I love little Boba.

Nela

I love jango and boba stories and this one is great! keep on writing them!

Boba-Jango fluff. So sweet!

This story really made me grin-I can completely see it happening! _

Sithstrukk,

Your sense of humor is apparent and your characters are engaging.

The dialogue is nicely accented with adjectives ("lightly ordered") and clarifying factors ("roared").

There is a lot of dialogue, which jumps from character to character. This could perhaps be further clarified with the inclusion of descriptors...for instance, "...Zam, who was a genial woman, chuckled." or "Boba, a misguided father, roared."

I like that the scene changed, but it was not immediately apparent. Perhaps you could indicate when there has been a shift in place/time.

"My Backpack's Got Jets" is a great title! It pulled me right in. And I really appreciated that the end of the story explained that Boba's backpack is the one that gets the 'jets'.

I am not sure that the near-empty fuel tanks are necessary to the story...it seemed that the tension in this scene was made artificial because it neither impacted the characters or the outcome. (i.e. It did not contribute to the story at large, except to help me understand that Zam is female).

This is a very nice short story, with an engaging sense of character development, use of title, and humor.

Thank you for posting!

Ed206B

Lol that was so cute. Keep up the great work :)