You need a beta reader to make sure that spelling and details are correct.

It's hakaku. Brian was one of the thunder brothers.

: I will read to the end of the story I'm very lazy to comment ~~~ soo... I just want to say I very like your story

:))))) wow So amazing . Ganbateru I like your story so much !

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Well...I can definitely say that I'll be reading the sequel once you post it and hopefully see some progress...not that i think your bad at writing this just...the pacing is the most aspect of the story that needs attention...oh and the facts can also be quite inconsistent...

dang...please work on the pacing but you know overall it was an ok story with a pretty freaking great storyline but wasn't executed as best as it should have been. The story could have been so much more.

Kagome says that she's apparently 'never seen Sesshoumaru sleeping so peacefully' like this before but she has, 3 more times in fact. Your facts don't match up, but again your story your rules.

I suggest you check your spelling errors and other mistakes throughout the story but like I mean...your choice.

W E A K

Why are they s K. I Mean how could that half breed deal so much damage when 2 freaking Daiyoukai's are in the premises...Just H O W. This is aggravating.

I mean the lemon was rushed...and isn't Sesshoumaru a little too uh eager?no thoughtless and lacking consideration to Kagome who is after or should I say was, a virgin...but i mean your story after all lmao.

ok ok I have to admit I was so caught off guard by that last part. I freaked out. literally.

This is way too rushed but...The story I suppose is interesting?

One in my opinion