You did a wonderful job. :) The little life metaphor thingy is fun. This sounds like a proper Toby. I thought he was exactly this way. Definitely love it.

I once fit more than twenty watermelons in the itty bitty rucksack. Gotta love Harvest Moon and its functional bottomless pits. Plus all the swim trunks. The Island must be adjacent to some massive beach or a swim trunks factory... Hmm...

I don't think you made Tao (Toby) OOC, I LOVE THE WAY YOU MADE HIM MATCHES HIM A LOT! You plan on making a series of Toby FF?

Well during the pregenacy event with Toby he gets violent! He STOMPS his foot! CAN YOU BELIEVE IT? Toby...damn...I just realized how much I'm like him...And WHERE THE HELL IS THE TOBY LOVE? I like all the guys...except Owen...he just seems to body-builder ish.

I really enjoyed this one. The whole philosophical theme was very appealing to me, and seemed to mix with Toby well. :] I'd love to see more of Kit Calamity's Toby.

So happy to read a good Toby fanfic! I agree with him being a difficult character to write, but I think you did well with his personality. _)b

Wow, that story was great! You're right; we need some more Toby love around here. I'm planning a story where one of my characters falls for him. But, oh my, I'm blathering! I enjoyed your writing style and your sense of humor, and how you portrayed Toby. Very good job!

You have to keep writing more stories like this!

Here comes my much-loved rambling~!

I'm so glad you wrote this, I just married Toby in AP and it's made me want to read some fanfics with the character. I was going to write one myself, but, like you said, it IS hard. I have no idea why! I don't know, but you've kind of inspired me to write one though.

Overall, I liked it. Loved the cute idea of it being a walk that represents their lives. I couldn't help but laugh around the end when Akari says, "I guess we'll be dying soon, huh?". In my opinion, great job, as always. :D

best toby fanfiction EVER

i loved the story line so much! please write some more!

This was amazing and probably the best Toby story I have ever read. I love the metaphor and how you intertwined it into the whole story.

I don't think Toby was OOC but I'm not totally sure of his personality either.

Akari's rucksack is a magical black hole that can hold a great number of things but you can get the items back XD

I'm not that huge a fan of toby, but I adore your other works, so I thought I would give it a try.

I'm gonna marry Toby, now, brb. I don't think you were OOC, actually! I think you portrayed him in a really realistic, honest way. He seemed like he had a pretty laid-back sense of humour, too. Maybe I'll marry him in my next game, for real. LOL.

LOOOOOOVE this story, too! You should do request one-shots! I would love to read something with Calvin!

The rucksack is magical!

TOBY 333

omg. seriously. i wanted a toby fanfiction for so long and you just read my mind! please excuse me as i go die of happiness now. like, omg. ahhhh

it was SO cute! i love how toby was written. i'm seriously in love with this fic! the characterization was awesome and just the story! the story was so original and fantastic!

so much love!