This is a pretty good story, it is daring and goes away from anything any other Sonic related company has ever done. Keep up the good work.

Definately should prolly be 'definitely'...

Anyway, I was almost certain this took place between Adventure 2 and Heroes- even despite the notice of the Egg Massacre vs. the X-Tornado, two vehicles that did not exist in either adventure- until I read that Cream was a pre-teen. Yeah, obvious notice that this is past that point.

Basic review.

I. love. robot stories. And when I say robot stories, I don't mean 'Must Destroy All Humans', I mean robot stories stemming from this line you've written

You are a robot: a one trick amalgamation of scrap metal. You have no mind or soul. You have only your programming. You can never do anything else.

For that line only you've earned a favorite. Still, there are others aspects that I happened to like, but since this is a basic review and not an in-depth one, I won't delve into.

you watch too much Doctor Who

Sorry. Can't log in to give ya a signed review, but whatever. Story's great!

Catfight!YEAH!

Good story,but why Metal wants that squirrel so much?

Metal have a lot to learn...so continue soon XD

Great,espesially the Metal Sonic were sort of poetic.

You seem to be much more confident with a fiction like this, then an OC one. I'd recommend you write more of these, and you would certainly improve.

The introduction wasn't so bad. It started with a very simple topic which was rain, and I tend to find fictions that start simply should be credited for. It gives the fiction more a mystery feeling to it. However as I progressed further I began to feel confused with the point of view. At first I thought it was Shadow, then I thought it was Sonic... but we never know who it is. BUT that may be the whole idea of it. If it is, I like it. Quite clever actually.

Yet again, you switch from POV to the next, and that is confusing. At least have a small subtitle stating who's point of view it is. It could be to add mystery to the fic, but after a while it does become very confusing.

I liked fictions that have drugs, sex and booze in it, but I found it a little bit hypocritical of you that you had condoms in this and obvious sexual tension. You state you don't want lemons, and I appreciate that. Be an example to FanFic, please, and show your true side.

Also, for example, when Sonic says something you wouldn't write what Shadow did on the same line. At one part you had Sonic speaking, and then Shadow shaking his head on the same line. It's confusing, and much more confusing as you didn't state it was Sonic speaking. The reader could easily mistake it as Shadow speaking.

Another piece of advice: use more interesting words. You use words like "walked", "looked", "stepped" repeatedly. Using them once or twice... you can get away with, but if you keep using them it does seem a little blank.

So far, the fiction looks like it has a lot of potential. Soon I shall go onto the next chapter, and see what will be going on between Amy and Shadow. In my opinion, those two were quite in character, so well done.

Thats a great story,keep like that.

Again, I'm very, very impressed. You've created a very interesting two characters, with two very different points of view. I have to say that I'm the most impressed with the way you write Metal. You are really digging deep into his character, and the fact that he doesn't really know how he is makes everything all the more satisfying to read. You have something going here, Echo. Really.

Shadow is very good, too. Again, I'm going to ask for you to put markers when you change POVs, because it's still a little confusing. As I was saying about Shadow, you're pretty good at keeping him in-character. He's cool and observant and not very caring about anything. However, I wouldn't say that blushing is something he would do. Perhaps just a slight widening of the eyes or a bite of the tongue. But I can't imagine Shadow with red cheeks, and I doubt many others can either. He's too smooth to get embarassed, really. Unless he's out-fought. Then he loses his cool, but that's another story.

My only other criticism is this: Slow down your horses with the sexual stuff. It makes the story seem kinda dirty and unappealing. If all that's going to happen is a bunch of sexual stuff, no one is going to be that interested in Shadow and Amy's relationship. Their relationship will eventually be a part of the story that the reader does not enjoy. You need to create some feeling in the characters, so that the reader will want to read more about them, and will really feel their emotions. They need to be likable, and a relationship simply about sex isn't necessarily likable.

That's about all I have to say. Excellent work, Echo, really.

Wow, Echo, I'm impressed. This is actually pretty dang good. You've improved so much with your description of the scene, as well as your description of the character's thoughts and feelings. It makes the reader appreciate the character much more, and thus makes the story more enjoyable. So far, you have a very interesting "cast of characters" here.

As for criticism, I only have a few minor things. For one, please alert the reader when you are switching point of views. I had to go back and re-read when you switched between Metal Sonic and Shadow's point of view, because it was very confusing. So if you could point that out next time, that would be nice. Second, you're still sometimes putting the wrong character action behind the wrong dialogue. For instance:

'"What would I be if I wasn't hunting you? I wonder." Sonic shrugged.

"I wonder what I would be, if I didn't have you in my rear view mirror." Shadow chuckled.

is what you wrote. The problem is that you put "Shadow chuckled" behind Sonic's dialogue, making the reader think it was Shadow who said the thing about the rear view mirror. See what I'm saying? It's confusing, so that's one other little touch up you could make.

Finally, be careful not to rush too much with Shadow and Amy. But that didn't seem like too much of a big deal, and I think you're doing pretty well. So nice work, Echs!

Wonderful work. Shadow exploring Amy's spare room and finding the contents and being practically forced/blackmailed into a relationship is extremly hilarious. I can only imagine more drama and humor heading in Shaows way.

Also serious kudos for Metal. You are really describing his inner struggle really well. I do find it kind of Ironic that Metal would be involed with Cream. Considering she has experience with him and Emerl. Metal did kidnap a Chao friend of her and cheese, and in Sonic X she pratically adopted Emerl and became real close to him until Emerl went beserk and She and cheese had to destory him.

Anyways keep doing what your doing. I patietly wait for the next page in well written story.

Very nice work, shadow is going to have a serious hell of time living with Amy. I can only imagine what Metal is going to do, I read many Fanfics with different choices and outcomes in Metal's life. My personal favorite being Metal Overdrive by The Conflicted Writer,if you have not read this fic I highly recommend you do, it's long but very entertaining.

Not that this fic isn't, I like how this story is going, and Pov is a very nice touch. It would help to have a sign or something to tell us from who's Pov is said from.

Anyway wonderful story, keep up the good work and good luck with Metals "destiny". I also look forward to Shadow's romance drama. Please update ASAP.

-claps- That was awesome~! Keep up the good work! And thank you for that little nod to Aridia too XD