update soon please it is getting good

My friend this story is amazing. I can't to read some more of this story.

Coolio! I looove it!

OMG I TOTALLY LUV THIS STORY!

Please update! This is great!

Great story.

Yayyy!you updated!Story's getting better and better keep it up.

Cool,it's a very interesting story,and pride and envy act like best friends!

omg i luv this story so far! i really hope lust tells edward how she feels bout him!:D

It's great that all the Elrics have been reunited. I love the brotherly affection that Ed and Al display for one another. That makes it a touching reunion.

I've come across some grammatical mistakes when I read through this chapter. Here are the following:

1. As always happened when he thought of his older brother, Alphonse's soft, grey eyes filled with tears.

Correction: As always, it happens when he thinks of his older brother. Alphonse's soft grey eyes filled with tears.

2. Little did they know that there wish was going to be granted, just not in the way they had thought and hoped for.

Correction: Little did they know that their wish was going to be granted but just not in the way they had thought and hoped for.

3. Sightings of homunculi were being sent in by reliable sources, but when the sightings were investigated, no evidence was ever found to confirm the statements.

Correction: Sightings of homunculi were being sent in by reliable sources, but no evidence was ever found to confirm the statements when the sightings were investigated.

4. The sources were some of the most respected citizens of Central, even some in the military's ranks; Miss Riza Hawkeye reported one such sighting.

Correction: The sources were some of the most respected citizens of Central, even some in the military's ranks. Miss Riza Hawkeye reported one such sighting. (Some sentences are better off written separately since they each refer to a different subject.)

5. When Hawkeye reported her sighting, she supplied and identification of the homunculus.

Correction: When Hawkeye reported her sighting, she supplied an identification of the homunculus.

6. The hunt had now begun.

Correction: The hunt has now begun. (The word "now" indicates present tense.)

7. "No, I guess it doesn't but I don't have to answer you two."

Correction: "No. I guess it doesn't, but I don't have to answer you two." (Putting the word "no" in that same sentence makes it a double negative, which means a positive result, since there's already the negative "don't.")

8. "Don't toy with us you murderer!"

Correction: "Don't toy with us, you murderer!"

9. There were few people in this world who could make sweet, kind Alphonse Elric feel hate, but Envy was one of them.

Correction: There are few people in this world who could make sweet, kind Alphonse Elric feel hate, and Envy is one of them.

10. Lust, wearing not her usual black dress and gloves but an emerald top with dark wash blue jeans and black sneakers, stood next to an unfamiliar man who was dressed in all black, from his T-shirt to his cargo pants and shoes, contrasting wonderfully with his pale skin, blond hair and the intricate red tattoo on his left arm.

Correction: Lust, not wearing her usual black dress and gloves but an emerald top with dark-wash blue jeans and black sneakers, stood next to an unfamiliar man who was dressed in all black from his t-shirt to his cargo pants and shoes that contrasted wonderfully with his pale skin, blond hair, and the intricate red tattoo on his left arm.

11. The most striking feature the man possessed however was his stunningly piercing amber gold eyes, staring at them now with confusion laced with a hint of amusement.

Correction: The most striking feature the man possessed, however, was his stunningly piercing amber gold eyes staring at them now with confusion laced with a hint of amusement.

12. "Hey there, brother mine."

Correction: "Hey there, brother of mine."

13. All Envy could do was nod in agreement; no one could deny the truth of that statement.

Correction: All Envy could do was nod in agreement. No one could deny the truth of that statement.

There's nothing wrong with alternating the storyline a little to fit into your own story idea. It's great to show some creativity. I'm interesting in reading your continuation of the story that's based off the videogame. (I've heard of "Bluebird's Illusion." It seems more tragic than the original anime series in the way that it ends.)

Whoa, that was . . . unexpected. I'm an EnvyxLust fan myself, but I like the whole brotherly comforting thing too. You need to slow down, killer, or else you're gonna hurt yourself! JKing!

Another great chapter. Aw, there was a little moment between Al and Pride. Brotherly love still goes on after death!

Pride: Um . . . technically I'm not actually dead.

Aw, Lust said a good thing at the end. I'm really liking this story. Good job :D

Hmm, intriguing idea. I shall follow this story to the end! *alrets*