Just stumbled upon this. Radiata Stories is a great game, and so is this fic. Hope to see more of this one day.

hey dude i noteist that you have not updated in a year and to that i say please update this has a ton of potencial so please update

Wow i got to say i really like you plot! its unique and interesting.. i really want to read more... i hope you can update soon

Hey! What's the big idea? In Chapter 8, you said "Finally done! I'm back and i'm pleased to say that I will FINISH this story! Keep checking in for updates guys, I promise to keep on updating." ! The suspense is killing me - this is one of the best Radiata Stories fanfics I have ever seen! I especially like the fluffy parts between Jack and Ridley. You have a real talent for that! Please tell me you are going to finish it eventually...!

The story of the 'other two dragons' and 'third sacred sword' seems pretty cheesy/cliche to me. More dragons? More Sacred swords?

'first time'? The decision to leave for the fairy camp came first. Its like you're ignoring the events of the Fairy path. The bulk of the story fits the human path. I'd recomend changing that.

Jasne scene was good though. It made sense and was in character. also Ridley's 'girlyness' freaking Jack out was funny.

'honey' and 'sweetie'? I think you can do better than that. In fact you did. 'princess perfect'

In my opinion, this is the best chapter yet. It had the best characterization and the best flow of events. They made sense and didn't feel werid. And the trainees finally got some characterization. Something like this should have earlier though, like after the battle. Everything between this and that feels werid.

That fluff was the best part so far. It definitely sounds like them. I still think its a werid continuation.

This is just a werid continuation of the fairy path. I have no idea why they returned to Radiata instead of Fort Helencia. Nor any idea why no one wants to kill or arrest them. It doesn't make any sense. You'd have been better off changing the ending of the human path if you wanted a story where Jack became Vancoor chief.

Unless you've forgotten, there aren't any dwarves in Earth Valley, they're all at the fort. BTW, what 'bussiness' did Ridley take care of in the first chapter?

Jack as the chief is really werid, and they seem to have gotten off the hook really easily. I liked Ridley's letter. It sounded like her.

Incredible...

The chapters that you made is really great and exclaimed. I'm still new so i'm still learning tought... I'm one of the indonesian people so i don't speak english really well... I'm looking foward to read the next chapter!

This is great so far! I've always been a huge Radiata Stories fan but there have never been to many fanfics for it. I hope you keep it up and thanks for writing.

It actually took me a moment to remember the story. But it's all good, I'm just glad you didn't give up! :) This is an interesting plot twist, so I can't wait to see what happens!

This is one of the more interesting post-game stories I've read, a bit WAFFY but nice none the less. I eagerly await more