It was good and all but do you know what's missing?
The story was too short to the end and i want spider-man to help more but you made this very short like you just made a crossover using ultimate spider-man cartoon and its bad,if this is a cartoon crossover then put spectaculer spider-man, and make a ship between the W.I.T.C.H girls or princess Elyon (because spidey always got him self laid with a lot of girlfriends in each crossover that i read so far, not gonna lie he has too many girlfriends), take my advice and your fanfic would be great

Great story, I liked how you brought out the characters!

Excellent story, keep up the good work.

This story is so cool, just wish you could write other Spider-Man w.i.t.c.h crossovers!

sads

It's cute but you could've done a lot more with the concept. I mean, with Spidey finding out he's a comic in another universe; you'd think he'd have questions. And probably be depressed (but not emo, don't even think about it) especially considering the dumbass concept of a comic One More Day.

And script format isn't allowed and I recommend using past tense.

This story was great! I like how you made Hay Lin the

mega-fan! I like how you kept Spidey in charater!

Keep up the good work!