I knew when I started reading this it wouldn't get finished, but damn it I couldn't stop reading. It was really well written, and had a very original plot. It's truly a shame it will not be continued. I know I'm years late but thanks for writing this unique story.

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please update!

I can't stand this! It goes on and on and on and on. You have to wait forever for something to happen between all your useless explanations and such. And your humor is not that great either. You may think that people shitting their pants or referring to sexual needs is funny but for the majority of the planet it just shows you what a low life is.

cool story. its really interesting. update soon cant wait to see more.

Sorry haven't read the latest chapter yet but I wanted to say that I read this story when you first published it and I'm really happy to see it continued. It's totally one of those stories that I read when I first started getting into DBZ fanfiction. Love it! It's great to see it again. Can't wait to see what's new from you!

Well its a great idea and general plot, but you have a bit of trouble with the execution. There are so many themes and topics and plotlines you want to persue, and you throw them all in there, and it becomes a bit jumbled; particularly with the extensive description and constant conflictory dialogue. In some ways it distracts to much and detracts from the plot and a clear idea of where it going or ablilty to keep up. But its is quite interesting what your doing with it, so keep up and I'm sure it will all be clear in the end.

This story is totally awesome! The only problem I have with it is that there's not more. This story is labeled as a Bulma/Vegeta romance. You started writing this more than 7 years ago and all you have to show for it is a ton of well-written yet still incomplete exposition. How long is it gonna take to get to the climax of this story let alone the resolution?

great chapter...finally some bulma/vegeta:D, I'm pretty curious how they end up together, especially vegeta being such a dark character...can't wait to see what happens next...By the way, i told you once and I'm gonna tell you again:"this is one of the greatest stories out there, ever"...update as fast as possible

i like your story!

Wohoo chapter seven rocked! But it just opened up a whole bucket of questions. hehe.

first question: what was up with that at the end, i thought frieza died. pooey i'm confused now.

2nd question: what's up the arm pain?

and now for last question so i wont bother you anymore.

3rd question: is that swollen injury in Raditiz leg like the vegeta had a long time ago ot anythin in that nature?

Okay okay i will stop asking questions.

I live the inner battle going inside vegeta he jus dont know it.

Again Amazing work on this chapter. kudos to you

Marie Antoinette

oh we i love your story. i want to apologize in advance for this being such a long review.

i last reviewed about a month and few days ago sorry about that. i had forgotten my password. anyways i love it.

Zarbon... he's well i don't know what to think yet... but... i would have done the same thing if i wanted to escape utter oblivion.

And uh oh the GF are in a for nasty big surprise. i love how write it's so original i felt like i was watching an unaired episode (gosh i'm lame). Anyways when Vegeta and bulma were talking in the cell i lterally had chills when he made the speech:

He walks as close as he could to her within the confines of the cell, his head slightly peering out between the gaps."No. Nothing. I don't believe I've ever left a planet without seeing to its destruction. Yes, I'm here to watch it all flush away by my hand, or another's, it make no difference. It's what I was made to do, it is what I live for, it is my only haven to witness the end of it all. Your end, little earthling, orchestrated in the symphony of unimaginable terror. To suffer endlessly in the demonic cesspool of sin, and trapped forever in the gates of fire can only be described as heavenly bliss in my eyes. So, when I say nothing, earth-girl I mean the complete evaporation of wonderful life in place of ugly, eternal, silencing, damnation!" he revealed looking grimly, having a seriously derange ambiance.

that part

anyways I chuckled at chi chi and goku in the kitchen. Gosh she always pulls the frying pan out of nowhere. lol The flashback was hilarious. "that was your tenth helping fatass" and then he eats the whole pot of gumbo. i love his reason "you could have burnt your self, hun" LMAO that was good.

Dude Vegeta is a badas mofo. One would not want to mess with him. i know i wouldnt an then after his huge blow up THEN nappa wakes not at the power surge but after the blast and burn everything away trick. he was so silly...Fuck Vegeta! You could've warned a saiyan! Damn it!" swore a groggy and severally wounded Nappa dressed in dilapidated armor. The heat was so direct and intense the metal in his armor burned feverishly into his skin, fusing with outer tissue layers. His hand feels against his slightly singed maroon face, pulling some melted skin off. He winces."Argg fucking shit!" He cursed, venting his agony...

oh my heavens Nappa is so retarded. i feel bad for him.

also just one last but it seemed to me that you repested that chapter twice in chapter six. either that iread it weird idk... KUDOS! to for such ana amzing story.

-Marie Antoinette

Hi VJ,

Overall a good chapter, up to most of your normal standards, but the first part of dialogue between characters was trying to be comical given a grave situation, and then the storyline becomes dark and brooding again as you switch to Vegeta, but then just every now and then you add small injections of humor readers would only get if they often read DBZ fics or watched the DBZ series and is a bit jarring.

Otherwise, I look forward to the contiuation of this story.

That is exceedingly well written. I enjoyed reading this. What exactly does her outfit look like? I wondering if you were going to put it back in. Something stirred inside Vegeta for Bulma. He isn't going to let the others touch her and he isn't going to touch her like that. He is basically protecting her but butchering her words at the same time. She can give it back just as well. This is definitely going to get interesting.

Can not wait for the next chapter!

this is really neat. thank you!