Gus, you dog~! 8DDD Pairing is total win.

So of course the writing and prose and characterization (SPECIAL LUFF) and ladiladida was beyond imaginable beauty. It almost makes me hate you, but I can't, for that is not the Catholic thing to do. :D

[They were like two blind mice ensnared by two smiling cats, too dazzled by the sharp claws and fanged grins to notice that they were caught.] While the simile is ~LOVE~, there's one contradiction that I'm not sure is purposeful or not. A blind mouse, if taken literally, isn't going to be able to see claws and smiles. Unless they were blinded by the dazzlement? DX But still. Sentence ish love.

As for the vagueness...don't change it too much. ;_; Perhaps a tiny bit more concrete, BUT ONLY A SCRAP. The joy of reading your works come from the unique ambiance you're able to create. I dun wanna see that gooooone...

And I can understand the story well enough kthxbai. .

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Beautifully written (could spot no grammar or spelling errors), but yes, a bit vague.

Thankfully I'm really into all the abstract writing, since that's how I usually think. I never really try to focus on the obvious up-front things, but I do that sometimes anyways.

I'm just taking a guess here, but it seems to start off as a love-at-first sight sort of thing, and they get all careless and rush into it (a lot like Romeo and Juliet). Enter love scene. Chan Lee is thinking of someone else, and from there on they fall apart as a couple. Gus realizes he's been naive to think they could have something and knows he's betrayed Spectra (that was probably the most obvious part).

The title's fitting for the drabble's plot, but you might want to add a Gus/Spectra tag, since that's what it sort of leaned to towards the end.

Maybe it's vague, but it's your style of writing and I love it. Yeah, it's kinda hard to understand, but I still can feel the emotion of the characters. You can deliver it in a beautiful yet tragic way :)

good fic