Totally Awesome!
thanks for writing!

really good

That was brilliant!

It was such an original idea, for this area of the Doctors life has not been covered to my knowledge. You handled the challenge very well and made it extremely convincing; I never for one second thought that it was not Gallifrey.

I also loved how you seemed to get the character of the Doctor spot on from the very beginning. He is a very nuanced and complex character, even at eight years old, and you nailed him right on the head, so well done :D

As usual, spelling and grammar was top-notch. The only error I found was that nearly every time you spelt Theta as Thete. You only spelt it Theta once or twice. It was very well structured, which made it very easy to read.

The only issue I have with it is that there was not enough description of his thoughts after he looks into the Untempered Schism but before he decides to become the Doctor. His decision to help people seemed a little out of the blue, and there didn't seem to be much reasoning behind it. Well, there was, but there wasn't enough of the Doctors thoughts as to why he decided to become the Doctor. If you get what I mean.

Other than that, it was absolutely fantastic :D Very well done. I can't wait to read whatever you write next.