HOLY - SHIT just went FUCKING down. And by the gods, was it glorious!

The writing I mean. The way you presented the action and characterization. Not that I'm thrilled by these events. In fact, these most recent chapters really had me clenching my mouse in antecipation and exhilarating enjoyment at reading them.

Now, since I'm a new reader... general impressions on the story: You have a way with words. The narration flows very well, and you always seem to have the right expression to pass along to the readers and invoke in them whatever it is the situation calls for.

The AU setting is an interesting one, and it's handled masterfully as well. I like having Aya and Momiji as the driving force behind the start of the event chain that eventually led to the giant mess that was Sakuya and Eirin's meeting. Aya's always seeking the truth, and when a story is about secrets, employing her enthusiasm to drive the story forward through the consequences of actions spawned by her is as good of a plot device as any other.

The characters were also amazingly well-done! Eirin is one that is quite open to interpretation, since she usually is all smiles and misleading words, but she also appears to have that hidden nature of scheming that will not hesitate to sacrifice anyone for her ends.

Kaguya's demaenor was one a little tamer compared to what I am used to seeing in others fan works. Ah, but one must take into consideration that her character is usually flanderized in order to meet the bar for humorous settings and her quirks highly exaggerated.

The dialogue is also rather strong, and I can safely say that the lines that matter to the development of the story and characters always carry IMPACT. Yet another proof that you are great at handling the pacing of the story, might I add.

I will be looking forward to more chapters of this excellent story! Hope yo uwill keep up the excellent work, and wish you all the best!

Wow. Eirin's own little hidden away monster.

Why do I get the feeling that Eirin made some kind of deal with the deal to perserve Sakuya's youth? Or something of the like anyway. This is intense! :0 I must see the resolution.

-It was on the night we found you. April sixteenth, nineteen-sixty.-

Nineteen-seventy, I think you mean. "Selestine" seems like a really odd name for a Lunarian, since it seems that they're all Japanese-ish.

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There is so much praise and fangasm just waiting to pour out of my fingertips and into this review but I don't think I have the skills to describe how AWESOME this chapter was. :0

I think I'm in love with your characterization of Sakuya. It's just, her last few lines were auuuuuuuuggggghhhhh. So. Perfect.

Aya and Momiji too. I never really pay them much mind in other media. I mean, they're there. They're cool. That's it. But when you have them blazing the trail for us, and having the mystery unfold from their perspective, I LOVE them. Especially Momiji. She is a character with SO much potential (it also helps that she doesn't have any lines in the game).

And Flandre. Oh goodness. Have I fangasmed enough? Jesus. Flandre. I think she's stolen my metaphorical heart. :0 I've seen various depictions of her psycho but this one, coupled with Sakuya's explanation to Aya for the reason why she acts so, is just auuuuuuughx10.

I look forward to the revelation of the truth. :D

I love your take on Sakuya's past. I also love the parallels you draw between Eirin and Sakuya and Remilia and Flandre. It's wonderful!

I wonder how Sakuya will react when the truth gets out. I have a feeling it won't work out too good for Eirin, seeing as how possessive Remilia can get. :(

Really interesting, I look forward to seeing where this goes. What I like best is your presentation of the characters: everything they say, and how they say it - it feels very true to them. Or at least they feel true to themselves within this story, since I guess I can't really say they have much to be true to based on the small amount of characterization in the actual games. Anyway, I'm liking this Touhou fic as much I as I liked your serious MGLN fics.

Dangerous things be afoot here.

On another note, I like your characterization of Momiji. For a character with no lines you really bring her to life in your story. :)

This is still really darn good, it's a shame more people don't review. You've got Eirin down perfectly, and you manage to make all the calm seem warped. I can't wait for things to start snowballing~

Okay, I've only read up to chapter 4 so far, but I think you might want to review your dates. In the prolouge, it takes place on April 11, 1970. However, in the first chapter you say it's thirty years later in 2010, and in the third chapter Suika talks about something that happened "thirty years ago" on April 16th. If my assumption is correct about the event Suika saw being related to the Apollo 13 mission, then you need to go back and fix everything: that happened FOURTY years ago.

And this is when the midden hits the windmill. On the SIXTEENTH of April, eh? I wonder what THAT's all about. XD

Good ole Suika always knows what's going on. Some secrets are meant to be kept yes, but the longer they're kept, the more time they have to brew in the dark. And brew they will, into something right nasty. I hope Aya and Momiji make it out okay.

Oh I -like- this. Sakuya's back-story is something I probably won't get tired of seeing in different ways, especially the Lunarian tack. Nice that it's tying into SSiB too. I'd like to see where it's going when you're done setting up the pieces.

Strange indeed.