Hi, (I changed my pen name from Mental Angel to Her Noobiness. I like that name much better)

It's been a while. I'm glad you came out with a new instalment to your story :)

I re read your story and I still love what's happening. I think that the entertainment industry really needs to go into the back stories of their antagonists. Blur the lines between good and evil and give all the characters qualities people would be able to relate to. I love how you're going into Gannon's character like that. As for Zarek, I really like that his name starts with a "Z". Other than that, I just feel like he's a blatant romantic interest for Aryll.

As far as improvement goes, I just recommend that you re read it and look for typos. That is probably the first step. Also look for grammatical errors. Someone else pointed out a paragraph where the Queen's Chosen Sapphire was speaking. You should look over that and anything else that catches your eye. I remember reading a part of your story that suddenly went from past tense to present tense. Another bit of advise I can give you is to take as much time as you need to post a chapter. I would rather read something that you're confident in posting than something that was half heartedly put up on FanFiction. I'm doing that with all the stories I'm working on, even though I haven't put anything up in a while. I kind of did the same thing that you did when you edited your chapters. Only, I completely re did everything.

If you want, I would be glad to proof read your previous chapters :)

yay, seagull time! Don't mess with Aryll~! XD

Great chapter, in my opinion the best on yet. Keep up the good work.

Y.

Seagulls have webbed feet, not talons, and their beaks are rounded... Maybe you could use kargorocs instead?

Congratulation on another chapter well done! _

woot, go Aryll. Show that b*tch who's boss. This is even better than it used to be.

Where did Aryll's paernts come from?

You never mentioned anything about them in any of the previous chapters. How did Aryll come to know of this?

Other then that one little thing, this was yet another awesome chapter.

This is very interesting. I always wondered what happened to Aryll after WW, and I'm glad to see she's not a sue. Compared to some other awful fics I've read today this one's pure gold!

Great chapter! Plz keep working on this and plz update again soon.

I have no idea why I haven't been reading this for a while. O It's all AMAZING! Makes me wanna bust out Wind Waker again just to see my Aryll.

I loved your story! My favorite parts was when you had Ayrll want to help all the other prisoners, and when Ayrll chased after pirates, that was funny. Honestly through my point of view I have no least favorite parts, the plot is still perfect. I love long storys, like it took seven chapters for Ayrll to leave the island, it was quite dramatic, sad, action, and adventerous. You have all the elements to make a good story.

Kinda funny, I don't remember Aryll helping Maggie escape, but now there is so much detail about it that it couldn't have NOT happened in the first draft. Awesomesauce chapter, and I can't wait for more, unless you actually have more (I kept the tab for this chapter open for at least a day, lol)

Awesome no matter how you put it _

As always, amazing chapter. Personally, in some places it was a bit hard to follow, but it was still very well written. Also, thanks for the reveiw, it ment a lot and yes a chapter is coming where everything is explained. Anyway keep up the great work and please update again soon. :)

I am sorry if it seems like I am ranting but I am not usually a good communicator so please forgive me as I want to see your story succeed even though life hates me.

Good chapter and I like the bond with the new fairy however you did not give the experssion of her Grandma seeing her child's own ship to command. Aryls grandma would probably have a heart-attack or maybe that happend which you didn't show for obvious reasons.

Story quote: "This boat I inhabit can be steered by one person but is meant for a crew of two or three. Since you are alone I will help steer while you sleep and if a storm should surprise us. This boat is made of magic just a much as it is made of wood."

And that's what they said about the Titanic so don't be giving people false ideas about ship safety and I hope her ship is armed LOL.

"Even God could not sink this ship".

Now if I were them I'd instead say "Even God could not FLOAT this ship" and then there wouldn't even be that worst maritime disaster in history though I'd have to say they had it coming unfortunatly with to many things gone wrong in communication.

It sucks Aryl's ship doesn't have special water-tight compartments to seal each section off in case of a magic attack that's stronger then the 'magic' protecting the ship or radio communcations to toak to each nearby ship.

Edit: Talk to each nearby ship.

In Titanics cases they used CQD as the distress call and halfway into the sinking switched over to SOS which does NOT stand for 'Save Our Souls' to debunk the myth.

Thanks for the story though did you delete one of my reviews? I like how Arylel isn't afraid to ask questions where most people will accept things blindly and jump off of a cliff if told to do so. :o

I also like the part where Aryll jumped off of that high place and won a fight against Orca and she is lucky she didn't kill him or 1st Degree Murder charges would be filed.

I wonder if OutSet island even HAS a jail or a holding place/hut to detain suspects until they get shipped to Windfall Island Sheriff?

Who is responsible for policing OutSet Island so if nothing else they can help people who are hurt?