Yes, that's good story.. I hope you make the side chapter about the wedding, but, well after all that's still good story .

That last sentence...oh thank God.

Awwwww...
it's so cute it's so cute it's so cute it's so cuuuuuuttteeeee
squeeeeee
heehee. Watanuki watanuki, how could you ever doubt doumeki for even a second? And doumeki, seriously! Stop teasing your boyfriend! (at least not when I'm not in front of you with a camera).
hee hee...

Sooo Cute!

AWE!

You got me with the ending!

*melts all over keyboard*

Oh, you again ;D

Thank you

***Pyrane***

Cute

it's interesting and well written

good work :)

Ring in bread, so unsanitary, bleh. Cute story, my first comment was just rooted from my dislike of matrimonial ceremony. But this really was adorable! Watanuk is just the cutest loudmouth I know xD

YYWKMN.

Awww. That was absolutely adorable. :3 Warm fuzzy feelings all around! They're in such different situations from canon, and yet their dynamics remain the same. I loved Doumeki's way of barreling his way into Watanuki's life, and how /loud/ Watanuki was even as he accepted his presence and started to make allowances for him. -grin- Oh Watanuki.

My one quibble was that the scene with Doumeki's mother seemed a bit off, like she either didn't know that Watanuki was the one Doumeki was interested in, or was being deliberately callous and misleading. She seems like a perfectly nice person, but she didn't make any move to reassure Watanuki after he jumps to conclusions, and sort of disappears after her line of "We should have you make Shizuka's wedding cake." I know you did it on purpose to build up the dramatic tension (believe me, it worked!), but I think it might have fit better if she'd said "the wedding cake" instead, or "your wedding cake" while looking at Doumeki, since by "your" she could've meant his and Watanuki's or just his. Doumeki's line, "I was going to tell you-" doesn't quite make sense in context, either. "I was going to ask you (if you would marry me, how you might feel about getting married, etc.)" feels more in line with the way he would've been feeling at the time, but I agree that it detracts from the shock and horror of the scene.

That said, I loved all the rest, especially the way you handled Watanuki's emotional breakdown, and the transitions between the scenes. I also liked that the matter of the envelopes was addressed (I did wonder what that was about at the beginning, though I soon decided they were orders and forgot about it in favor of more interesting events). Am I right in assuming that they were congratulations/RSVPs for the wedding? Though I guess it's awfully late to respond on the day of the ceremony... And hooray, Himawari and Kohane!

Wonderful job all the way! I love your work. :)

I can honestly and whole-heartedly say that I love this to pieces. I'm glad it became more than a drabble... I would've loved for it to have been a multiple chapter arc but for what it is, I love it. In a single one-shot, you managed to develop and convey a blossoming love with all the sincerity that is usually only found in those really long multi-chapter fictions. This was an absolute delight to read and is easily a favorite of mine that I'll read again and again. Splendid work.

Lol. I was almost afraid that Doumeki is marrying someone else. :P Thank god. hahaha

It's not the first time I read it, but I'm not sure I wrote a review, so here it is.

I really like this story it's so cute!

Hatsu