Great poem girl! Haven't read your original version but i'm sure it was okay. Loved this version though. Really sad but really sweet! Going on my faves!

:) Aw, this one is good, but I think the Goten one is way better. no offense ;)

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THAT WAS SOOOOO SAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAD!

But I like it! I do! _

You're really great with poems, did you know that? Anyway, that's it for now!

Keep up the great work!

This is a great poem. i loved how u always repeated the line and that the ending verse was about similar to the first. that has aa great effect. Well done!

That was just beautiful! It sums up her feelings and it has poetry all wrapped up in a nice little package. All I can say is keep writing!

Very cool!

OMG i LOVE this!