i reveiwed to let you know this has touched me in a very deep personal way, in a way i will never forget this story. I understand obi wan completley and it is very hard. You captured each moment perfectly. Obi-wan was sad but not "i am a baby" sad, it was obi-wan being sad in a mature way. The part where qui-gon touched the ribbon and was bombarded by all the sadness and visions, it was, breathtaking.

this was my absolute favorite part of the story, the part that made me feel horrible for obi wan, it was also the part that "touched me in the deep personal way":

I tapped into one of the visions that was hitting me through the Force and nearly gasped at the intensity of the emotions. In my mind I could see Obi-Wan, coming back to the Temple after receiving his award. He had snuck quietly into our quarters but upon realizing I hadn't returned from Tahl's yet he had collapsed in the center of the room, falling to his knees with a small cry. Tears had streamed down his face and I could distinctly hear him asking what he had to do to make me care for him.

i loved when he said: what do i have to do to make him care for me.

I love this story.

Peace Out!

All I can say is: Thank you ever so much for writing this. I have to agree 100% with your view on the last books. I like Tahl as a character, but I absolutely did not like the random romance thrown in with her and Qui-Gon. I especially did not like how unnecessarily tense and strained it made his and Obi-Wan's relationship. I enjoyed all the books until that little sub-plot became a main focus. [/rant oh I'm so sorry]

As for your story, all I can say is that it's one of my favorites. I love how you wrote it, whether they were a bit out of character or not. I'm not a huge fan of first-person stories, but this one really stood out to me. I loved it. Amazing job! :D

~Kyuuketsuki_Nekko

I love it! This is one of those stories where you read it, and it's like the author put emotion into it! I actually cried. You are a great author!

Great story! Keep up the good work:)

Whatever gods graced you with the ability to make people cry must have also conveniently forgotten to give me at least some immunity to it. You're the only person I know who has written so many pieces of work that can make my tears fall through the entirety of them. I liked this, despite how Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan are out of character. It was a good idea, and very well-written, naturally.

~ Umbrae

This was an absolutely beautiful piece. Thank you for letting me read it. It was wonderful.

wow this has to be the most amazing Obi-Wan Gui-Gon story i have EVER read, i was practically crying when i read it, awsome job and i hope to see more from you -

hehe...Hi! I know this is old...and I'd like to comment on all your stuff! if you want, I will But this is my FAVORITE story! I lovers it! the angst of it all! ok..I'm done. *squele* ok really I'm done. I love how you make that Father/son connection without it being a..."love" story (if ya know what I mean) thanks for making great fiction.

That was so sweet! Poor Obi-Wan. Glad they talked it out!

This is so sweet. It has to be one of my all time favourite stories...

Nelarun of Australia

AH HOW SWEET :D THAT'S SO DAMNED SWEET

aw, that was so sweet. i really like sweet obi/qui 'fics' i really hope to see more from you

This is one of my fav stories. I try not to cry every time I read it. ;) Good work!

Sweet! It's so nice to find a fic where two men are friends and can hug and comfort each ither without it being a slash. This is cool.

Aww, I just love this kind of mush. I love your work, and I like reading these short stories, but could you please work more on "Shrouded by Darkness?" Thanks.

-Atheilen.