That was awesome

Awesomeness loved the blood, gore, betrayal, and sadness.

make another story about them having a kid and have the story follow the kids life

Wow, this story seemed pretty harsh (in a good way I guess). Sometimes it seemed a little hard to follow but I really enjoyed reading it. Well done.

the way this is written makes it too hard to read and understand it doesnt flow in a straight line so i had to give up

really good story

Omg i loved ur story.

I guess u should update dis often;)

oh god... THIS IS HORRID.

MUST... KEEP... READING!

whoaaaaaaa... that was a bit harsh. killing a child. no sleep for me tonight (not that i would get any otherwise, I'm nocturnal).

Nice story.

There were a few (a lot) of spelling mistakes, and a few grammatical errors that made it a little hard to read in certain sections, but I applaud you for the seemingly depressing story you were able to finish. I'm sure if you went back and looked over everything again you would be able to see some of the things I'm talking about.

For example; you misused a few homophones like through and threw a lot during the story, and it made it a little confusing.

I'm not trying to be insulting or anything of the sort, I just like to point out a few mistakes when I can.

All in all, there aren't many fan fictions that are nearly this dark, and I love the fact that you were able to pull it off. I look forward to reading more from you.

i love this story. i REALLY do. but... FUCK YOU FOR RAPING MOKA YOU FUCKING BASTARD! cant wait til next chapter! (DONT do that again...) :[

whats the second meaning to UNDYING ROSES FOR MY UNDYING LOVE?

I love the story, you just need to spell check and proof read more often.

nice chapter cant wait to read the next one