I legitimately cannot put together a storyline of any kind, the writing is too bad.

Still waiting for chap 5...

I like how every character in this fic has the emotional depth of a potato. Not just any potato, but a bigass starchy Russet potato that's been boiled for an hour and is basically falling apart.

Oh wait, that has more characterization than any of your characters here. Forget it, every character in this story is just a plain ol' potato.

AWESOME STORY! You should brush up your grammar a bit. :3 LOVE IT! :3

Wow now this chapter irrevocably shows some huge improvement Shannon! :D keep up the good work! *starts clapping and praising*.

Hey this isn't bad at all! And you said you get flames *grin forms on my face*! Those aren't flames merely constructive criticism to help improvise your story's structure :). Your spelling isn't that bad either :P. I mean there are a few flaws here and there, but you have quite a good plot developing despite the fact that it's yaoi I think right? But yeah I think you're actually a really good writer keep it up!

Great plot, but the emotions that take place would have a lot more effect if proper grammar was in place. Consider getting a beta-reader or something because I'm sure we are all not perfect in English, but it would greatly help in the quality.

~PXLight~

Oooooo, new chapter~

I like how it's coming along, and I just checked out the Trauma Center archive yesterday XD

~Sky'sShadow

I love the plot! but..no quotation marks? It's kinda confusing without them, but it's manageable. I hope you continue it! It would be a nice story! -

many spelling and grammatical errors, too many.