i had 2 go somewhere more privet bc my throbbing bonner would have made my family suspicious. herminee is so hot i wanna put my bonner n her vajena rl bad. oh boy i'm about to cum... hnrggggggggh...anyway love your wrok

So they want to go somewhere private. From the dorm room (that Harry cannot enter, because the stairs turn into a slide and an alarm sounds and summons McGonagall) with the four poster beds where they can easily spell the drapes shut and use a silencing charm; to the COMMON room where they first make light so that anyone who stumbles around can see them and start on the couch in plain sight.
I like a PWP story but the few sentences that are not about gliding genitals should make at least a little sense. Please.

Um maybe your are not cut out to be a um ... author,
If i where you i would find something else to do ... apart from posting on fanfiction.

I would say get a beta to fix this mess, but honestly I think it'd be better off deleted. Sorry but this is ridiculous.

Shitty summary, shitty story.

nice story

:)

giuliette

well... to be totally honest this story is just that bit slightly disgusting. i mean this should be age rated what if some kid somewhere was to read it their parents would have a fit lol im 18 and i no all that stuff anyway but thats not the point lol.

michael, i love you so much, but i agree with kyran x

mike your a sick perverted little boy :/ im so disgusted in you o(:L

It was great.