That's the wrong kind of tear...

This story is horrible. There is almost no punctuation. There is no plot. Terrible grammar { I mean returned the knock, why the hell does that mean?} the enter key was abused and it's just like a bunch of random word put together, almost rambling. I think you should just take the story down because I don't think you want to be tied to this awful shit that you want to call a story I mean really its OOC and just terrible. you'll be doing yourself a favor.

this is way to sad. it isn't exact;y written good and is extremely confusing because the correct writing form isn't being used( no punctuation{like quotation marks and indenting and stuff}) this was extremely boring. sorry...

"retreated the knock"? Please fix the grammar; it makes it easier to read. It's a decent piece of angst writing other than that.

Oh, my. Not this. Sorry, but, this story stinks. Like, BAD. It's not even a story. Its just a bunch of incoherrent words to me. Here's why I think it is so bad:

1: Inproper use of the 'enter' key

2: No capitalization where neccessary

3: No punctuation

4: No quotation marks

5: Misspelling

6: OOC-ness

7: No plot

8: rambling

Honestly, I don't mean to be rude. I'm just trying to help out, ya know, for any future stories.

Good luck and good writing to you!

Wahhhh! It's so sad! Grammer needs work though. And change the rating to a K dude. You only put it as an M if you have a lemon(sex), A heavy lime (Moments leading up to a lime), Heavy swearing, gore and stuff like that.

Very nice job though.