OH COME ON! REALLY ITS NOT EVEN FINISHED?! AAAAAHGGGHGGHHGG

I know it's been a while but, I hope you continue your story one day. It is extremely well written.

The part where Ombre came in was so badass! I just like how he freaked everyone out. I just hope Aimee gets better soon...

No happy middle ground? no fair

It looks like things are starting to get really interesting. I have to say that I liked that you took the time to introduce character development prior to this major event, though. As for constructive criticism, I think that scene where Tid got kidnapped could use some work in the atmosphere/mood department. The description of the setting during that scene was perfect, but it felt as though it was missing some...intensity? I'm not entirely sure how to phrase it. If you want, I could try to clear it up later, but right now my mind's sort of foggy from school work. I hope you continue writing!

japaneserockergirl

Painful

This is a great story! I particularly like your writing style. It is different from many others in a good way. I can't find the exact words i'm looking for, (english isn't my native language) but it is original. I belive it is the comparisons and mainly the many interesting adjectives. I'm not quite sure I understand them all, which is why I have to read the story again with a dictionary beside me when you finish it so I can fully understand and enjoy it. But right now it's so good I don't have time to look up words! d(_)b

The characters and the surroundings are so well described I'm having no difficulties imagening them.

The story itself is also good. It dosn't stand still for a second. Aimee (AKA Tid) with her problems as an eevee, the sinister incidents (e.g. Ombre's voice and the shadow ch. 3) and the fact Aimee's physical body is in coma.

Please continue. I for one can't wait.

PS. love the part in chapter 3 with God and counting. PRICELESS

Poor, poor Tid-I mean, Aimee. Will she ever recover those memories? Will Water and the others ever discover just where she is? Jeez, I'm starting to sound like the preview for a Pokemon episode. By the way, why do you have your chapter titles like that? It's not that I don't like it, but it makes me wonder...

A dragonite pacing...

Wow

Unfortunately, I don't have much to say about this chapter. Keep writing, though!

japaneserockergirl

I'm curious as to what will happen if or when Aimee remembers her past life. Will she stay with Ice or go back to Water and Co.?

This is starting to remind me a lot of Pokemon Mystery Dungeon, but there's actually a twist. Thank God! Most PMD or PMD-like fics are just simple retellings of the game, which annoys me. It's nice to have someone who considers using some originality for once in regards to PMD. I hope you update soon!

A pretty exciting beginning; it reminds a lot of Indiana Jones, for some weird reason. However, some parts were very confusing, since I'm not entirely sure who you were referring to at times when you said 'she'. And is the character's partner a Pokemon? (A stupid question, I know, but I'm not entirely sure.)

Update soon!