Somehow your story has made me like Kate/Neal a little bit more. I'm a Neal/Sara fan personally but I love your story.

Keep writting it,

-El

you should totally just keep writing new ones...the older ones are good and if you go back and re-do them it'll take longer for the new ones and then i'll be sad...and when i'm sad i tend to blow up things, personal things that may or may not belong to you (haha, jk i wouldn't really blow up your stuff...on purpose) but please add another chapter soon cause you're writing is awesome as is

well, I personally have loved them all and don't want you to waste time re-writing something that was already good. Spend your time writing new stories. It's cool to see you grow as a writer. Plus we get more Neal that way. I say "if it ain't broke, don't fix it". Good stuff, more please. Sincerely.

Nice, don't fix your old ones. Look back, after you've written some more, and see how much your writing has improved.

I love these. The last one made it almost hard for me to breathe. Imagining the longing for outside and being trapped... Beautiful. ~Nayah

Oooh. That was superbly written. It made me think. Poor Neal!

Depressing, but with a uplifting mood. If that makes any sense, if not, it's a good thing.

:)

-K

so sad

O.0

Hmm. I really liked this, it was deep. Neal is amazing and I loved how he was only focused on getting to Peter.

I think I want more...

-K

Aw, sweet. Neal rocks. And so does Peter. Haha! I went and watched the end. I think that's what he was talking about... but not entirely sure. I liked this one, it was good. Neal, as usual, was able to outsmart him. Haha... Neal.

Ah, Poor Neal. Already so wounded and so young.

An unhappy little boy... very moving description of young Neal.

I agree Neal is a person who cares 'too deeply'. He is a passionate person. It is yet to be seen how he will respond to heartbreak. I love that you gave us some insight into his early past, and what might have shaped him. Please keep these coming! They really make me think!