This story is a joke. I changed my mind entirely. Hot fucking garbage. Never write again.

I guess it's a good thing you abandoned this... I don't know. I like it, but I really don't.

It's 'than', not 'then'. "You should know better THAN that, retard."

It's 'You're' as in, YOU ARE, not 'your'. "YOU'RE a fucking retard."

I've read this story 3 times now. I still don't understand what's going on.

I know it's been a while since you've updated. It comes to my attention that I consistently think of this story every month or so. Hoping it's been updated, but knowing it hasn't. I really enjoyed the character development between Cortana and the Chief.

It was beautiful and touching and the Crew of the Normandy hand excellent character as well.

This story consistantly blew me away and I love to re-read it every once in a while. It's that engrossing. I genuinely believe it's one of the best crossovers of Halo and Mass Effect. It's one of the better Stories bar none.

This is just really interesting and I can't wait for Cortana's and Master Chief reunion

Halo belongs to 343i now. It's no longer Bungie's property

I liked the chapter!1

Excellent story so far! There's some formatting problems here and there that makes it hard to tell that there's been a change of perspective, but that's small peas compared to the magnificence that is this story. I love the AU aspects you've introduced from the very beginning of the story, I love how you've gone about the crossover aspect, and I love your characterization. The only thing that makes me sad is that this story hasn't been updated in four years. );

Jesus H. Christ man, where have you been all my life. That was mindblowing! The details you put into the scenes and the emotions in Cortana's musings, no one could have pulled it off better.

Are my eyes deceiving me? Did you just give Mass Effect mjolnir and augmentation to make a spartan and you tried to justify it by saying "chief would want me to do this". First of all the chief has indoctrinated with military ideals, destroy the tech so it doesn't fall in enemy hands. I can't believe I stayed up late to read this story only to be slapped with disappointment.

Between the large number of typos and spelling errors and cringe inducing characterizations I am going to have to drop this. It is too awkward and heavy handed for me to really keep reading.

Also, It is flash-clone. Not snap-clone. Cloned brains also suffer nueral degredation. It is the one thing they can't clone and keep viable. It is why they used them in the first place to replace the Spartans as children.

Good luck with it though..

While this fic has a great deal of promise. It is in need of some editing here and there. Mostly to trim the fat and make it more streamlined all around. Too much narration here, over the top prose there, and just little excesses scattered about..

While I don't mind F-Shep/Garrus pairings. This one doesn't quite do it for me. Can't really find the words at the moment, so you'll have to just leave it there..

That being said. I have to bring up my issues with Cortana whom is being way too.. romantically inclined towards the Chief. Whose relationship just doesn't work that way. Sure, it can seem that way at times with how close they are. You try not to be close with someone whom has helped your ass out of the fire on multiple occasions and whom has been a constant companion. They're good friends and that is the only thing they should be. Cortana would get possesive when it came to her caveman and that was about it.

You need more Nylund-ness basically.

No Cortana/Chief is an insta-drop.

Perfect writing. It's so hard to find something that's just good.