Ahaha! Like a headless chicken! Rofl lmao! Anyways that was a good short story! Liked it lots ;)

Lol! I love the whole thing but the part where it says Hikaru was running around like a headless chicken made me laugh Sooooooo hard! It reminded me of something my friend did... ;)

okay! Imma fav. this now 'cause it was so funny %D

The story needs improvement. But...overall...

Okay, I guess..

Lol Hikaru runs around like a headless chicken

I can totally see Tamaki freaking out at that situation

Really liked it XD

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I wish this would happen. Kyoya, Tamaki, and Kaoru should have a little threesome so then Haruhi and Hikaru could be together. Genius!

KYOKAO YAY! Hmhmm, I like this story, some how, I dont think it is Kyoya thats being corrupted...I dont think anyone is corrupted in that relationship

xD Awesome :D Everyone's was brilliantly in character - Huni and Mori being supportive, Haruhi not really caring, and Hikaru and Tamaki panicking like idiots- perfect xD

Kudos!

~Mimi x

HEY! WEB CRITIQUE! YOU STUPID JACK-ASS! GET OFF HER CASE! WHO ACTUALY CARES ABOUT SPELLING! PEOPLE WRITE FOR THE FUN OF IT! IT KINDA SPOILS IT WHEN SOMEONE FLAMES YA!

SERIOUSLY BACK OFF! IT'S OK MIMI, I'LL PROTECT YOU!

IF YOU DIDN'T LIKE IT THEN DON'T REVIEW!

I'VE HAD MY SHARES OF FLAMES SO I KNOW HOW IT FEELS! I'VE SEEN SOME PEOPLE DELETE STORIES BECAUSE OFF FLAMES!

I HOPE YOU READ THIS SOON MIMI, DON'T LISTEN TO THEM! THIS WAS GREAT!

I THINK IT'S GOOD THAT LEAST ONE PERSON APART FROM ME GAVE A NICE-ISH REVIEW!

NOW LISTEN UP! MIMI'S ACTUALLY QUITE A SENSITIVE PERSON (please don't kill me Mimi, but I had to tell them) SO CONSIDER HOW SHE MIGHT FEEL!

GR! STUPID WEB CRITIQUE!

NO ONE FLAMES MY FRIEND AND GETS AWAY WITH IT!

S.L

xs and huggies

Wasn't really TamaHaru ;-;
But, you are lucky that I am a KyoKao lover ;D So, I'm not going to act like I did once after getting pissed at someone for putting a HikaHaru fic on TamaHaru. This is way more KyoKao. But, still, I like KyoKao.

Cute attempt. Please read through this and spell-check it, there's quite a lot that needs to be corrected P.
You write Haruhi alright, and Tamaki's recognizable, but Honey needs some work (he talks like a child, remember), I'm not even going to go into what was wrong with Hikaoru and Kyouya needs a personality check.
He is cool and calculating but kind underneath. He goes along with most things the Lord says and only politely corrects him. He would -never- say anything about his innocence to anyone.
This is a strange pairing, but I'm open to enything if someone can make it work. Unfortunately, this has a long way to go. Think more carefully about how the twins and Kyouya behave and react to different situations.
Good effort )