Very well written. During Mark's speech, i could really get a sense of how menacing he is, the feeling of not knowing what hes leading up to but knowing it won't be anything good. Mark comes off very Magneto-esque to me, in the best way possible, in that he seems to know he's doing wrong things and believes its either the only way to do things or that it'll all work out in the end. A sorta sense that he's a zealot to his own believes, or in other words that he drank his own Kool-aid.

I'd like to inform you I found you via glowing recommendation at TvTropes and probably expected greatness as well. The turnoff was your OC but bias does that flesh him out and then we can party happily in Newfoundland with them rocks. I love those rocks. and the fresh air is brilliant.

Good points: great grammer, pretty good spelling, nice wording/narration, you are very good at battle scenes, your characterization of Providence and the monkey are top-notch.

Bad points: I swear to god, that OC needs some slapping, or at least the pretentiousness needs to be pointed out deliberately as a character flaw for most people to take it sitting. Also though Rex is hot-headed, he still is a likable and actually not that idiotic of a character, which I feel is the source of your 'foil' oc and your Rex characterization. But really, whatever. Six is nice. I appreciate the monkey getting some awesome action and the intro of other canon villains at the end.

BYE.

...Look, I'm trying /really hard/ here, but all you've done so far is focus blushingly on your OC, who's only flaw, as far as I can tell, is his inability to shut up and a fondness for food. I appreciate that he is a super-threat but this beatdown is making our main character a completely hopeless screaming idiot.

So... I'm hoping competence comes to this pompous former fat kid with a presumably angsty past and evil future.

Eeeeeeh let's see what happens.

Wow. You have a lot here for only 6 chapters. I already feel like I've just finished reading a single fanfiction. Granted, there are several reasons for that. Length for one, but your writing style is also difficult for me to follow at times. It's not smooth, you jump very quickly from one idea to a next when describing scenes. Sometimes there's a change in viewpoint and I don't even realized it's happen, such as with Mark's first confrontation with Grant.

Nonetheless, your characterization is deep and works well. It's fun to go back to a story that started before of a lot of the show's character development. I wish the show had stuck with Rex's motivation problems when controlling his nanites, but characterization marches on. I also like Agent Six and his somewhat ambiguity - another part I wish the show had stuck longer with. Am waiting to see more of your Holiday and White. They haven't been in the fic much, and I'll be interested to see if you take them the same route as the show, which I've liked so far.

And then finally, your villain. I know he's supposed to be sympathetic, but quite simply I hate him. Never been a fan of the self-righteouss. I do like that he's well-fleshed out and whatever (more OCs need this), and I also like that you're exploring telepathy very realistically. But I still also can't help but to dislike new villains that just come in and sweep the scene and I feel that you're treading a fine line between good characterization and villain sue. Was glad to see that Providence was landing some hits on him by the end. I'm interested to see how Van Kleiss will factor into this, and I hope that Mark won't take him out of the picture too. I'll be keeping an eye on this fanfic.

I really enjoy this story. It appears to be well thought out and the creativity with which you made your characters is amazing. Not many fanfictions can boast both accurate accounts of origianl characters and intigrate original works. I say it once, I say it twice; bravo, bravo.

his face covered with a black baklava and goggles (ch2)

I'm imagining this guy with delicious pastry on his face. The word you mean is balaclava, I think. Great fic so far!

nice fic

Schism . . . instead sympathizing with him I find myself hating him. An interesting story. That is all I will decide for now.

-P4L

You know, I'd actually forgotten about this. thank God for Story alert. Had to reread everything , too. And as I tell everyone else...

MOAR!

Simply breathtaking. The fine detail effortlessly entwined into the flawless writing style is absolutely stunning. Enchanted from the very first word, I found your story to be bold and interesting. The plot is subtle yet intense, the characters are rich in description and true to themselves, the concept for the antagonist is refreshing. Schism is a villain who easily relatable, which puts the reader in a difficult position. They're forced to decide if he is in fact a villain or just an innocent victim, and at what point does innocent victim turn villain. The concept is brilliant. Your story is one that actually makes the reader use their brain and I applaud you for that. Excellent work. This is, without a doubt, the best fanfiction and one of the more memorable pieces of written works I have read in my life and believe me when I say I have read quite a few. I am glad you updated and hope you do so again in the near future.

wow ur exellent...i worship u

lol jk gj !

sorry i fogot to say this is my other review but other that the minnor inacuracies your story is truly fantastic. You are on hell of a writer. sorry if my language offends you. and I personily think if you were to change the names of rex's weponds to what they are in the show and take out six'x use of the gun it would be even more fantastic. also I really am not trying to be rude.

six uses swords. and Rex's weponds have different names. my sugestion is when you write a fanfiction get accurate information. look on cartoon networks page for Generator Rex, It will tell you. I know it was based on an old comic book series but it is acutaly not anything like the series from what I've seen. so i'd suggest you look up your information befor continuing. I am not rying to soud roud or anything but most people don't like to read fanfictions that arn't at least close to the actual story.

I love all the Doctor Who references!

A horse and a man, above, below,

One has a plan but two must go.

Mile after mile, above, beneath,

One has a smile, one has teeth.

Though the man above might say hello,

Expect no love from the beast below.