I love it

Im crying! This is so beautiful!. Best siblings ever! 10/10

:)! that was sooo adorable ! loved it and oooo manga inspired , thats exciting , .

I really like how you captured the dynamic between the three of them.

Aww, I'm glad the two of them got that resolved; this is one of the few times that I didn't detest the Serah/Snow pairing in a story, by the way. Nice work.

I really liked this fic, this reminds us why we love Lightning, he can be the grumpy bear of the team, but everyone knows she has a heart of gold.

I really liked this story. You portrayed the characters perfectly, but I don't think Lightning would have been so outright in saying Snow is an idiot. All in all, I really enjoyed this, and I hope you add on to it!

I really love Lightning. No matter she's in a bad mood.555

Nice one. :)

Serah seems a LOT more responisble here than she it in the game ( bless her soul anyway ). I just wish they could have portrayed here like this...

You're Snow and Lightning are spot on too, although I don't think that Lightning knew that Snow and Serah were going out until the birthday scene...

This is a very good story! You captured the characters very well and it's always nice to see Serah take the spotlight every once and a while. Well done!

Holy crap. This was very good. Very few writers can get each character's personalities as right as you did. Would you mind if I add this story to my C2? :)

Oh wow! This was fantastically written. You gave a great personality to Serah, and everyone else were in character. I loved the descriptions, especially about Lightning. That was...wow. Just wow.

*sniff*

Aww... I can't remember the last time I read a family story so sweet. Great job! I think everyone was pretty in character too.

Aww... This was a very cute piece! I was surprised at how much characterization you managed to fit into this one-shot.

Despite her small appearance in the game, you've really seemed to capture Sarah's personality. Her shy, almost nervous, interactions with Lightning totally lead up to/complement the way she handles having to tell Light, later, that she's a l'Cie.

You did a good job with Snow too! We got to see both his airheaded happy-go-lucky side and his compassionate side all in one go! lol I'm still cringing at the whole "sticky-syrup kiss" Eww! He's such a kid! XD

Stubborn, quick to anger, and struggling with that pesky little soft side that won't just disappear, you nailed down Lightning's character as well! I lol-ed at Light's "thunderous expression". D (I swear, whoever named the characters was just asking for punning on a massive scale XD)

I enjoyed the little glimpse of how everyone might've meshed together before the whole l'Cie mess. Great job!

Oh, I really liked this. It's nice to see a fanfic where Serah isn't being obnoxiously "cutesy". You had a lot of depth here, and I really like how you portrayed both she and Lightning. I know it says "complete", but I hope to see more of these two from you. :)

Great job.