I saw this fanfiction and want to read it. I had read comments about this fiction and many had said it is good soi want start reading it,but I can't understand why you hab to change naruto name if it's female you can make it naruko like it always. But why another name.

That was truly beautiful. Subarashii

Did you already published the sequel of this story?

Definite improvements, but yes, feels a bit rushed and not fully fleshed out. Many important events occur that would have a huge emotional toll but they're glossed over in favor of moving the plot. There also isn't a clear arch of events from startproblemconclusioncliff-hanger which makes it seem this entire chapter could just be a prologue.
Alternatively, you could spend more time with Sayo developing her emotions and world to make the entire chapter more powerful.

It seems odd that the brothers would have to kill each other, if what they were seeking was an eye transplant shouldn't they just trade eyes. The lore behind seemed a little vague to me, I suppose the whole purpose was a plot device for drama and tragedy. However the explanation I've seen seems like it could have been done without sacrifice. Trauma of losing family? Genjustu, trauma can be induced without actually killing them... so long as they believe it happened briefly. Unless their justu consumes the siblings soul or something... I dunno, but then again, the uchiha aren't known for their creativity or their ability to think outside of the box.. so, looking for an alternative working method beyond what was written might never occur to them.

this is messed up... and the battles are waaaay too short!

OMG! so many characters are completely ooc as well as many naruto facts being wrong! but its a good story. tho i find it hilarious that izuna married before madara! lol! hes supposed to be the oder brother.

YAASS! fem naruto x madara for the win!

I love Orochimaru in this story! He's adorable :)

Thank you for writing such a beautiful story. The way in which you described each character is so beautiful that worda cannot describe it. The plots and circumstances stated and their perfect emotional display has made it realistic.,

waiting for sequel.

One of the bestest fanfics ive ever had the chance to read, worth every minute of it. The right amount of logic, drama, angst and romance. And the waterworks wouldnt stop at chap 47 when assuming they died, loved how that went. Though the ending was not that catchy, maybe it was to introduce your later work. Anyyywaaay, im in love with your style and keep up the good work ;)

I'm sorry I lost interest. Good luck

She has a baby bump at three months? Shit that's weird. I didn't start showing really till six.

She is very mary-sue. But I'll keep reading. I thought I should warn people if they arnt into fics with op protagonist.

best part I'm reading this while listening to rockabye I'm crying so hard