Not bad at all, Sweetie.

I'm right disappointed they didn't help each other out a little more!

Wow, very sexy situation. The storyline isn't really new, but you're giving a hot description of a hot Jasper :)

One thing I minded during reading: the "screech/moan", I mean the slash. Never good in a story.

xx

This was really good. You did a great job.

Kathy

aww its too bad they didnt fuck. but still pretty hot ;)

That was really good

Wow...pretty fun! Thank you.