Nice story! :) you write really good and should continue this.

YES! Yay for another chapter~ :D Alex and Kendra were awesomely written, as always. I loved their interaction with each other :3

I gotta admit, I'm starting to like Trish almost as much as my own characters. She's devious, yet awesome! And oooooh, what does she have in mind with Grace? I guess only time can tell. But I already know that Trent isn't going to like it one bit xD

Awesome, AWESOME chapter! I can' wait to see how Trent likes his meals and how the girls deal with the rest of the challenge.

PS- You're lovely, too :3

LOL! Could you make Max less, uhm, not sane? She's normal, except she has paranoia issues, and states random facts, and when nervous, blurts out even more random stuff. Good job though! Maybe some more face time with her and Trent'd be nice?)

hahaha, you make Nicole such a brat that even I hate her! Your writing is excellent, as always. You rock!

This should be fun seeing Grace and his Dad come

His Dad is going to try to stop him to play the Guitar

And Grace is possibly going to hate Gwen Sister

and won't Gwen hate her sister due to the fact that she is hitting on Trent?

Okay.

This is for both chapters, but my computer for some reason decided to ban the secodn chapter from my view... so i'm posting it like this.

You did a very good job with characterization and making everyone's personalities "pop", but I have one thing you need to work on:

you're shoving Trish into the spotlight.

This is Trent's Rock of Love, it should mainly be about him and the girls; putting Trish in there is fine, but don't center it around her. :/ That's one thing that tends to ruin very good stories. There's also a bit off too much describing of Trish's appearance, which is part of the 'spotlight'. We don't really need to know her eyes look just like emeralds or her cheeks are as rosy as, well, roses.

Other than that, it's an excellent story.

Yay~ I can feel the TRINDSAY LURVE :D

Anyways, sorry for the late review. Real life gets in the way of stuff, y'know? But great, GREAT job! Alex and Kendra could not have possibly been more in character! You sure did an awesome writing these girls up. :)

Lol with the lil Grace reference. For the sake of technicallity (I his a word..?) though, Grace was actually three during her evil streak, but that's a very minor mistake that's barely worth mentioning...so I probably shouldn't have xP

I know you said you rushed Trish, but I'm seriosly liking her. She's neat :3 And all of the other girls are awesome, too. We did a good job picking x3 And Trent? Perfect amount of epic Trentness~ :D

I cannot wait for th next chapter! I'm on the edge of my seat to see what these lovely ladies have to do first... ;)

EPIC Maxine line: "Yay!" Max cried, clasping her hands together. "Can I watch?" LOL! Nice job, you're great at portraying OCs! I hope Max can stay in long, and not make a complete dork of herself...

Oh, I love the first chapter! All the characters seem very interesting :)

*does happy dance and claps in an unever patern*

BOO-YEAH!

Ronni and Lotte have brought 19th century New York to the table XD *wink wink nudge nudge* yeah, i'm totally loving them already. no joke.

I love the way you wrote Inola, most people don't get her character straight on but you did beautifully! I can't wait for the next chapter, love the characters you chose they all made me laugh, and your writing style is wonderful!

Can't wait to see what happens next.
Wonderful part by having Gwen's sister on it, Clementine, way to add to the drama.

Name: Hayden Marx

Gender: Female

Stereotype: Hip-Hop Dancer/Flirty Rapper

Appearance: She has long wavy dark red hair (dyed naturally jet black), with straight bangs down to the bottom of her eyes. She is 1/4 asian and that part of her is represented through her eyes. But, her eyes are a honey-bronze color. she has very dark tan skin from being 1/4 african-canadian. She is a little on the short side being exactly five feet tall. She's skinny with some curves weighing 129 lbs.

Clothing: She normally wears a red hoodie with a black tank top underneath, a small black ballerina tutu/skirt . And black high top chucks. She also has a black diamond necklace with a skull pendant.

Her swimwear is a very small red bikini with black paint splatters.

Her formal is a tight black strapless dress with red rose around the bottom she will wear super high red heels with it, and she will have huge black hoops in her ears and she will wear her skull necklace.

Her Pajamas are a red pair of lacy boyshorts, and a tight black t-shirt. She will also wear a red bandana on her head.

Personality: Hayden is one a live wire of a girl. She is very outspoken, and if she has a problem with another girl, she won't hesitate to tell her about the issue. Hayden can be very flirty, and I mean she flirts with EVERYONE (regardless of gender -or- relationship status). Hopefully, Trent won't have an issue with that. She can be a little of a hot-head at times but, she hopes to keep it under control. If Hayden makes a few friends here she will always have their back and hopefully they'll have hers. Despite everything else about her, Hayden is a peace whenever she is dancing or rapping. Maybe Trent's love will put her at peace too?

Likes:Dancing, Rapping, Flirting, learning how to DJ
Dislikes: Goody-Two-Shoes, Classical Music, and tacos

Phobia: Having to wear a Princess Gown.

History: Hayden grew up in a very diverse creative household. Her mother is Chinese and Black, and a spoken word poet . Her father is Cuban and White, and a dance instructor. So she was raised to be a very artistic person. Hayden's temper comes from her father, and the two get into arguments all the time that her passive mother always tries to break up. So, since arguments erupt almost everytime she's at home; Hayden spends most of her time at the dance studio, or at her friends' houses making raps.

Favorite Food:Lotus Root Soup

Favorite Beverage:Guarapo

Hobbies: Dancing, writing raps

Most Prized Possession: Her photo of her and her dad when she was a toddler tucked away in her suitcase

How would they react around Trent?: She will be super-flirty almost overly so. But, when they are one-on-one she'll talk to him about music etc.

How would they act around Trish?: She'll be pretty much her regular outspoken hot-headed self.

How would they act around contestants?: She'll be friends with the more outgoing ones, and she'll probably pester the quiet ones.

Favorite thing about Trent: His laidback way of flirting.

Least Favorite thing about Trent: How clingy he was with Gwen.

Their dream date: Going out into the middle of nowhere to look at the stars and listen to Trent play is guitar.

Other: Please pick Hayden! :)

Name (first and last): Margaret Moore

Gender: Female

Stereotype: The Misreader

Appearance (hair, eyes, skin, height, weight, etc.): Margaret is of Métis lineage (like Courtney and Katie) but has short light blonde hair and green eyes from her father's side. She's above average in height, standing at 5' 5'' and weighs around 130lbs. Her body can be described as modelesque. She possesses a beautiful face, well developed chest and hips with a narrow waist.

Clothing (Normal, Swimsuit, Formal, Pajamas):
Normal: Tight blue jeans, red tank top with blue windbreaker, and red converse sneakers.
Swimsuit: Red one piece with opening around bellybutton and exposed back.
Formal: Blue prom/cocktail dress and shoulder sash with blue pumps.
Pajamas: Large, loose fitting red t-shirt, blue flannel pants, and bunny slippers.

Personality (be specific): Margaret is a really sweet girl always smiling and enjoying life. Her less than normal family life (see history) however has left her personality straddling the line between confidence and meekness. She tends to misread situations and motives others (nothing that’s blatantly obvious, more subtle ones) leading her to be forward and confident in one situation and timid and self-conscious another. This has led her to make friends with the wrong people early on in school, only to be ditched when they no longer needed her. But despite this, she’s a sweet caring girls that loves life and spending time with people she KNOWS are her friends. She’s willing to do anything with her friends, even if its something she hates or isn’t really good at. She’s also very uncomfortable with her body. When people stare at her she thinks it’s because she’s ugly or weird, not because she’s drop dead gorgeous.

Likes: Biking, listening to music, hanging out with friends

Dislikes: People who take advantage of others, allergies, horror movies

Phobia: Large bodies of water that are not pools. She saw Jaws when she was a kid and has been terrified of the sea, ponds, lakes, and streams ever since. The only reason she isn't afraid of pools is when she found out sharks can’t survive in chlorine.

History: Margaret’s family life is normal, but has a family make up that deviates from the norm. Her dad is the one who stays at home and cooks dinner, while her mom is the one with a upscale job and brings home the bacon. Her father is very protective of Margaret, always reminding her to be careful and know when to back down while her mother tells her to be aggressive and work hard at everything she does. These conflicting parenting styles resulted in Margaret being a bit of random, but it’s all forgivable in that both her parents love her very much and just want what’s best for her, which is exactly why they signed her up for the contest. They all watched the TDI and TDA and noticed Margaret’s crush on Trent. He was is one of their favorites too and both feel he is the perfect guy for her and see his break up with Gwen would be the best way to solve both teens’ problems. Parental logic huh?

Favorite Food: Chicken strips and pepperoni pizza

Favorite Beverage: Chocolate Shakes

Hobbies: When not hanging out with her friends Margaret can be found biking around town or listening to her iPod at home in her room. Sometimes she does both, but needless to say this has caused quite a few accidents. She ran over a kid (He was fine). She works as a pet sitter, which is an improvement over her first job as a baby sitter since she was tricked too easily by her charges.

Most Prized Possession: A signed cast from 3 years ago. It’s from a school field trip when she broke her leg falling down a incline. Her ‘friends’ just ran off and didn’t tell anyone thinking they got in trouble. She would’ve been stuck there if another group hadn’t heard her cries for help and carried her all the back to the bus to the hospital. They stayed with her during her stay in the hospital and well after the cast came off. They’ve been her best friends ever sense.

How would they react around Trent?: She would be excited to meet him since she’s had a crush on him ever since TDI. She’d try to play it cool, but would probably pass out if he asked her for a soda, thinking it was a grand romantic gesture or something. She’ll try to get his attention in a way that hopefully won’t embarrass him or herself. XD

How would they act around Trish?: I think she’d like her, because unlike most of the girls at her school, she seems to care about Trent and only wants what’s best for him and isn’t the type to manipulate people. I can see them getting along well at the very least.

How would they act around contestants?: Margaret has some bad experience with most of the girls at her school. Outside of the ones she’s already friends with; most of her friends are guys who are like brothers or not into girls to begin with. I see her being rather cautious with the other girls, not rude, but having to wait for them to prove to her that they can be trusted.

Favorite thing about Trent: How straight forward and sweet he is. As far as she’s concerned he’s the most honest guy in the world and above manipulating others and lying. Also the fact that’s he’s a musician, rides a motorcycle, and attractive doesn’t hurt either.

Least Favorite thing about Trent: His 9 obsession. She’s a little concerned about that.

Their dream date: Riding his motorcycle through the city with the music blasting to a dinner for two for some authentic Italian pizza.

Other: She hates being called Marge. It stems from when the boys called her "Large Marge" in grade school. She hasn't realized that it wasn't an insult and not about what she thought it was.

Hey! I've changed my mind about my OC. Could you take my review down please?

I'm planning to join the total drama fanfic wiki and I want to use my character there so I was like hoping you coul take her down. I'm worried other people might read her profile and steal ideas. I know I sound paranoid but it happens sometimes.

Thanks again n I'll stay tuned for this cool story! D

Hi!

I changed my mind. I really really like your story but I'd like to take down my OC!

I'm like thinking of starting my own story with her over on total drama fanfic wiki so I'm just worried about other people reaidng her info and like taking ideas from her.

Can you remove my review? Thank you! D