Amazing story , the end felt like it was a bit cut short, BUT the humour, I died laughing at some parts.
Thank you for sharing :-)
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This is all over the fucking place, it barely makes sense, the characters are over dramatic, its just...juvenile.

"that tanya girl"? Edward is with...Tanya Denali? EWWWWWWWWWWW

I REALLY don't fucking understand why Bella is in so much "pain" over Edward not remembering her. It really doesn't make any sense, they barely knew each other and then he was dead. So its not like she should be that invested in him. And honestly? Fuck Edward! He is no one in this story.

ya but who is the other sister? Coral?

Edward "saves" her and BAM they're together? I thought Edward lusted after coral

I’m not a fan how the story went. I liked the beginning, but the rest well...

Again, this makes no sense. Why would James attempt to rape Bella at a party with both the families where it is 100% likely he will be caught? It's totally unrealistic and unnecessary. Are you gonna throw in a failed rape attempt every time the plot starts to lag?

This doesn't work at all. The writing style is so unrealistic for the time period you're attempting to represent. No one used the word "freaking" in the 1910s. Women also did not wear tiny revealing dresses. Modesty was a virtue. It would be incredibly scandalous for a newlywed woman to allow another man to flirt with her and touch her inappropriately. And a rich eligible man would not marry beneath his social status for no apparent reason. Sorry but nothing about this is remotely accurate. If you want to include a different time era, why not just spend a little time doing some research and presenting it accurately?

It was an interesting concept with a really poor execution.

how in the fuck did Edward come to love bella?

god your story is dumb...I don't know why I keep reading it...hoping you'll let someone proof it before you post the next chapter...someone with a brain should look at it, fix it for you before you post...LOL

I don't understand why bella loves Edward...I just don't get it

bullshit drama...force it much?

she should just tell him, we were married you hated me but liked coral...we never even had sex sooooo it doesn't really matter!

what the fuck are you doing to the story?
bella hand was made to hold the hand of a child who Edward is playing daddy too?
yaaaaa bella your hand was made to hold tanyas fucking kids hand...that makes a lot of sense!
its fate !
Edward married you even though he didn't want to-fate
he treated you like shit-fate
flirted with other women-fate
he died- fate
fucked tanwhore-fate
took over daddy duties for tanwhores kid- fate
and all just so you could someday mother a kid that's NOT FUCKING YOURS forget the fact that its not Edward either. though he does fuck its mother...
this story is sooooo fucked up

HAHAHAHA bella would give her life for him?
she holds ALL of their memories dear?
what memories?
Edward not looking at her as shes coming down the isle
Edward glaring at her whilst flirting with some whore
Edward telling her not to unpack in HIS room?
Edward letting coral touch him at dinner
Edward flirting with coral at dinner
Edward glaring at her for no reason

yup lots of great memories to treasure! LOL

oh and lets not forget that Edwards been fucking the worlds biggest WHORE TANYA!

chapter 15 is sad...but the only thing sad about it is how fucking pathetic bella is!

shes all up on some dude she didn't even know...some dude that treated her like crap except this one time...he touched my cheek and chuckled! so I pined for him for 100 years and now I want to kill myself cause he held hands with someone! and I would NEVER expect that of MY Edward...cause he spent the whole night of our wedding flirting with some other girl!

LOL
bella is fucking pathetic