It's really upsetting that you didn't even try. The characters are OOC and you need to flesh out the plot more (and actually have a plot). You're grammar, puntuation and spelling is horrendous and it made it painful to read. I suggest getting a Beta and turning on spellcheck. You need to describe the basics - Who, What, When, Were, How - because nothing here makes sense and I have no idea what the hecks going on.

P.S You spelt 'grammar' wrong in you're name

finish, don't leave off the conversation like that.

I like the idea of the story, but I find it really helpful if I read my chapters over before I publish and look for errors. I also have my friend the beta ( loststorisehogwartz ) check it over if I really want to be a perfectionist. Double-checking always helps :) and dont take the comments below to heart, some of them just want to help (but dome of them are just being mean) so take their ideas into consideration and don't give up on your story! (I like stories with meddling as I said in my first review)

-team Leo leader

I like the idea of the story, but I find it really helpful if I read my chapters over before I publish and look for errors. I also have my friend the beta ( loststorisehogwartz ) check it over if I really want to be a perfectionist. Double-checking always helps :) and dont take the comments below to heart, some of them just want to help (but dome of them are just being mean) so take their ideas into consideration and don't give up on your story! (And I like trouble making in stories)

-team Leo leader

MORE MEDDLING PLEASE

WTF. Why the hell would you write this crap? Just please spare me from the perils of OCCness and all the things that pollute this fandom.
-Charizard
PS. Why do you read Twilight? It's freaking stupid.

Erm...one of the good authors Tearful shadows were accused of stealing your work. U better try to rectify this, because you are far fomr a good writer, and your stories don't make sense. I think you are just jealous, and you better stop claiming other's works as your own

Didn't make sense

What the firetruck?

Okay, I'm going to attempt to help you with this. Dear God bless me.

First of all, you grammar isn't bad. It sucks like crap. And your plots are worse. Honestly, the spelling was okay, but I don't think you went three words without an obvious grammatical error. Please, for the sake of all things holy and pure, get a Beta who is *extremely* patient.

The plot line sucks. I'm not even sure what it was. In the summary you said something about a... website? What the fudge? And then you TRIED to go all "mushy-fluff," but it didn't work. You don't even have the basics of writing down.

How do we fix this? GET A FREAKING BETA, OR PAY ATTENTION IN ENGLISH! Jeez, it's not that hard! And if you can't pay attention or if all your beta's die from the suckiness of it all, just do us all a favor and stop writing.

Wow. I tried to help you but a total hate review came out. Your story was so bad it made ME write a FLAME. I DON'T write flames, like, ever!

Wow. I'm going to go puke in a bucket now.

You have bad grammar girl. Enough said.

Interesting

*shudder* *averts eyes* *throws up* YOU SHOULDN'T EVEN BE ALLOWED ON ! Your pen name says it all. 'bad-grammar-girl' SERIOUSLY! THE FIRST SENTENCE HAD ME THROWING UP IN MY MOUTH A LITTLE! Me and my awesome girlfriend Annabeth is not gramatically correct. It should be-

'My awesome girlfriend, Annabeth, and I.'

Please delete this so others don't have the unfortuante luck of reading this accidentally.

~harrypotterobsessed33

(PS) Feel free to PM and rant. It'll be funny to hear what you have to say fro yourself. :P

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