Woo, a songfic! I lovedd it. I think it takes a lot of creativity to do something like that and have it be believable.

You already know how I feel about this. Wonderful, and imaginative.

Well done, really well done. I think you're off to a good start and would love to see a story from you so you could showcase other skills: dialogue, character development etc. I think it's a good songfic all the same. You definitely have more to give.