"Hey hears an idear"

This story has a good IDEA but the exucution was not very good. You need to use more comma's and spell check. There is no "r" in idea. Also, you used the wrong form of hear. You said "hears" like they heard an idea. Instead of saying here, like I have an idea. You should also work on sentence structure a little more.

With all that said the story could have been sweet if you had used more details and less grammatical errors.

Next time try to describe more and make sure you double check your writing. (:

I LOVE IT! one of the best shorts ever!

Very Good.

But you know me, I'm not normally intersted in your stories, mainly because you are my sister and you write about the same thing nearly all the time.

I think it would of been better if you had made it longer, but other than that...

... I think you have done a good job.

To me, it is obvious you have put alot of thought into it.

So overall...

... Very well done!

x

Aww... So sweet! A perfect oneshot of them getting together.

Cuteness overload, and I completely agree, they are the cutest couple! :)

Jazzola :)