Wow. That was beautifully written. The way it was formatted was beautiful. I know the other reviews have been picking on you for your lack of capitalization, but I could see that it was intentional, from the way it's a constant lack, rather then a hit-or-miss typo sort of lack. It's even in the title and the author's note. (Yeah, another thing, the author's note/introduction is lovely) There's something about that that just adds to the feeling and mood of this story.

This is beautifully written and well describe, but try to capitalize when needed, it kinda ruined the flow of it.

Great job otherwise!

Yes yes. This is a creative story indeed and Smellerbee and Longshot are both IC.

The only thing that bothered me was the lack of capitalization. Remember to capitalize the first word in every sentence and whenever you use "I".

Keep writing and have a nice day.

~Summer