Unbelievable. Yes run for cover.

I guess I don't have a soul, because I not only read this, but I liked it. :D

Oh.

My.

Ghod.

This is darker than dark.

owie.

you should do more like this. awsome. truly enjoyed it.

wow! just wow! that was intense and a surprise. didn't see it coming. i see there is a sequel. off to read it now. please keep writing!

That was dark but very, very good ! I really enjoyed it as oneshot and of course Gibbs was OOC.

If one reads slash in a series where the characters are straight on TV and loves whump than one will come to read and enjoy rape. It has nothing to do with own sexual fantasies or the own sex life. Many readers enjoy a good torture in fanfiction and no one will watch or do this in real life. That these readers are mostly female is because a hurt character is so good to nurse back to health.

Back to your story: Excellent written, short but to the point, with the main focus to a very dark and mean Gibbs. I would like to read a story from you where Tony as a rape victim is put together by Gibbs with a slash ending. Great work !

This was disturbing, but I liked it. In fact, I more than just liked it.

For the reviewers who said that you were condoning rape - get the fuck over it.

This is fanfiction (the key word, kiddies, is "FICTION")

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Anywho. It's hard to find a decent rape story, and I'm glad I stumbled upon this one. Why not write about rape? It happens every single fucking day.

Besides, if the people who gave you flames thought THIS was disturbing, they should try looking at some of the rape/incest/abortion fetish stories that lurk in this site.

Run for cover? I should think not. The story was dark and desperate...I really enjoyed it, perhaps I should join in in finding cover...

Really, I think that reading it again and knowing it was Gibbs gave him a weakness and general obsessive quality I found fascinating. Expand on this, please.

Okay, good story, but there is problems, a BIG problem with it.

"Tony shivered as His hands roamed over his body." when you stared out the story you made it difficult to understand who was who. So when I reached this line, like many others, I found it confusing.

In that sentence you stated that Tony was screwing himself. You can't have the character be called him and then use him for Tony in the same sentence like you have, it will confuse your readers and make them think what I thought.

Try 'Tony shivered as his raper's hands roamed over his body.' In that sentence I made it clear that his belongs to Tony and it was the Raper's hands, not Tony, feeling him up.

In the beginning are you stating the Raper or Tony who closed his eyes; Clarify for us who is who and who is doing what. It will improve the story and keep it consistent and understandable.

Other then that, can't wait to see what the other part to this is Gibbs was totally OCC but I loved that in this story. Shows that he's been wanting this for a while.

P.S. In the end 'After all this time, he finally lost his will to fight. This faceless bastard did that to him.' Are you stating that the raper came back more then once? Because in that point you are stating that Tony has been raped more then once by him.

So again, please clarify if this was his first time or not.

I do think that you should not have published this scene 'as is'. Without context it does appear to condone rape and I don't think any warnings can really address how inappropriate that is.

I have no problem with dark themes, or graphic male sex. But there is a HUGE difference between making love and raping someone. Gibbs didn't make love to Tony. He raped him! Anyone should be able to see that. And from your A/N it appears you realized the story was indeed wrong. And all the people reviewing about how wonderful it was are basically condoning rape. No matter how well written it may be, NOTHING justifies this type of action.

One reviewer says that Gibbs has a dark side. Yes he does but is she saying that he would eagerly rape someone? Another says that maybe they wanted this from the beginning. Is he/she saying that Tony asked to be raped? I doubt those reviewers would want to be forced against their free will like Tony was.

You should be ashamed and so should they. This kind of attitude is what gives legitamite consenting adult sex a bad name.

I loved it. Don't duck. There is a dark side to Leroy Jethro Gibbs. You so need to write another one based on this.

don't duck, stand with what you wrote, and then write a sequel. What pushed Gibbs to this? Did Tony recognize the voice or smell of Gibbs? What happens to Tony next and how does he deal with this rape? OR was this all some geme they play? See, plenty of stuff to write a sequel with.

Disturbing but well written story

No running for cover now, young miss.

You can hide behind me if it's necessary.

What a twisted thing for Gibbs to be... raises a lot of questions, foremost being Why? Why would Gibbs take from Tony when he could've wooed the man? I don't think it'd have been all that difficult, yes? Why would Gibbs jeopardize not only his career, but his team dynamic, his friendships, and... well... his very life? (Just don't see any of the others allowing Gibbs to get away with this... alive)

I'm really interested in seeing what you'd write as a sequel. Please.

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