Aww love it, I with there was a little separation when just ping from one scene to the next. Almost thought she was dreaming it since he was the the line after she shut her eyes.

Oh... ️ One pain gone and now there might just be an empty void...

That was really cute. Are you saying the other chapter are different versions of this?...

cute

lovely revision.

AHH I LOVE IT!XD

great chapter I kinda feel bad for Kaelin but I wanted S&D to get together. is this the end or is there more?

YAY! this story is soo brilliant and soo sweet! hehehe, poor kaelin...

wow! hope u write more stories!

thnxx..

LF aqua.r

I rely like this chapter it has so much going on and i love the bit when they were saying what he liked and what he was allergic to loved it soo funny please update soon

Whoo! Wow. That was awesome. Kaelin is such a brat. I'm glad Darien came to his senses. It was a wonderful story. )

I liked the story, but it was missing some depth and it felt like you rushed it in order to get chapters out for your readers. If you're going to rewrite and expnd on a story, take some time to have fun with it. Give Darien and Serena more challenges to go through before they get back together-extend the vaction, have them deal with each other as rulers and try to ignore each other. Give kaelin more of a personality and presence or there's really no point in having her there. She just takes up space and serves as someone Darien used to convinve himself that he didn't love Serena anymore. Have her fight to keep him.

Again, the story was still a good read, but ti could use some tuning. Good luck in your future endeavors.

The ending was so beautiful! Great story!

i really like this story so pls see if u can update or finish it in the next chapter

OH! EVIL PLANNING! THIS I MUST SEE! PLEASE WRITE MORE SOON!

I can't wait to see what they are plotting!