Wow. That was so amazing! I loved that I had to go translate it, Mimi talking in Spanish is awesome! Keep up the fabulous work!

Wow. Heavy stuff. But really good.

You have a nice writing style, but for the love of all that's good and holy do NOT call this story "My Immortal". Not that it isn't a good song, because I really love it, but "My Immortal" is the title of the most notoriously bad fanfiction ever written (seriously, google it. It's a Harry Potter fic and dubbed the worst fanfiction in the history of ever). Because you don't want that name to taint your work, take some other lyrics from the song and make that your title, like "All of me" or something like that.

-beagle :)

ohmygod, this is so sad! i'm so glad Roger came back though! great story!