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I really like the idea of this story but we've got barely any info on what Harry actually can do
We know some Genjutsu, some few jutsu and perhaps wind manipulation but nothing more and he should've already learnt a little of his family from the goblins when he went there to manage his accounts and the books for muggleborn and extra books should've been enough for him to not be so incredibly clueless that it hurts to read

probaly make harry find on shore mask of shinigami dead remove soul shard from him and turn him into uzumaki from naruto probaly dead turn hermione back into human uzumaki harry sister (hermione become sane good girl use ilusions to hide uzumaki body and turn similiar kushina uzumaki)they in secret train in use adamantine sealing chains. and more.

The premise was good. I've only seen it done thrice in fanfiction. Only one of which was completed.

While the premise is good, the actual execution is bad. It's a confused fanfic. It doesn't know if it's serious or crack. It's too cracky to be serious, and too serious to be cracky. Settle for one and make it good.

The plot is plodding. It's too slow. I have yet to see any major improvements in Harry.

Perfect

Good nineteen chapters

The trouble is that you bit off more than you can chew. All these OOCs and events coking from the left side deviated from what is a good premise, Harry developing chakra. It could have been great if you focused on a singular goal for Harry.

I wish you had Harry assign clones to each branch of magic and have them study it. Then have some clones who practice magical defense and offense. I found it teeth rattling to continue expecting Harry to do so and yet not see any indication that he will

Changing Hermione like that was another of your failed decisions. It was unnecessary and superfluous to the story.

Sigh. You didn't need that ninja organisation to make this fic interesting. It added an unnecessary complication.

... urg ... i dont know if you can use this but i think Hermon the possession thing not a good idea it just makes one punch man kind of over powered and unbalanced the story.

Interesting store hate that you got stuck but enjoyed what you were able to come up with.

It will be interesting to see how harry and Dumbledore will interact