Why couldn't Advent Children have ended with this? This was so amazing. So heartfelt and emotional and the lemon was just freaking perfect. Although poor Denzel, being somewhat snuffed out like that in the beginning. Though I understand where Cloud's coming from/ /

a.m.a.z.i.n.g. is all i can say.

Gah! I love Clack! And this story! However, be warned: critiquing is going to take place. If I sound like a hater/troll/flamer, I don't mean to come across like that; I'm trying to give you tips for improvement. That being said, here's my problem with this:

I have no idea when this is taking place.

Yes, it was well written. Yes, the details were PHENOMENAL. Yes, I loved every second of the Clack you wrote.

And yes, I was confused.

I couldn't tell whether this story was set during Advent Children (which was my first guess) or some other time period. I was especially confused because if it was sent during AC, then how the heck was Zack there? I mean, I don't mean to spoil the plot line or anything, but didn't he die during Crisis Core? I don't want to sound like a hater or anything, but I was just really, REALLY confused. Another thing, I like the paragraph structure you have, it's well written, but at the beginning, I couldn't tell who the little boy was. I guessed Denzel, but I really wasn't sure until a few paragraphs in. If you could clear that up, please do.

Oh wow!That was so sad adn beautifully happy,i don't even need to know how he's back!I'm just happy it's alright!WOW!loved the style,the words,everything!

Very very nice! Beautifully written

This is really good. Honestly. I could feel the despair and pain and the imagery was fantastic. Everything you wrote, I could see and feel and that makes for an awesome story. Thanks for writing this!

MY GOD I SWEAR GO I ALMOST CRIED AT THE BEGINNIN poor cloud T_T and i totally adore the way you write and describe things it was beatiful
Hope to read more of you Il check your fics!

Uhmm... I'm a grammar freak, so don't mind me...

Beta offering here... :) I'd be happy to, cuz the run-on sentences bug me...

Other than that, I LOVE the story and it's extremely well written! :D

4/5, just cuz of my freakness... :3

~Hana-chan

wow this was an awesome fic! I totally loved it. Good job on it.

This was, beautiful. Borderline perfect.

I could be content reading this and believing that this is what ended up happening. This just so fits where their story left off.

The raw emotion was perfectly done and it was realistic. Which is hard to find.

I hope to get to read more of this pairing and more from this category from you.

So, without further ado,

thanks for writing. ]

~WhiteNoseHound

I absolutely worship the way you wrote this fic. The love scene was not smutty, but loving, romantic. Your way of writing is exquisite.

Congratulations on a job well done.

Very sweet and sad...I hope Zack is back for real and not just a beautiful dream. 3