lol Elva

This is awesome. You should update.

silly angela

I have to tell you this...

At first I misread your A:Note... I thought you said this chapter was Murtagh's POV... and for some reason, my eyes scanned down and saw the following words...

"He glared at me, and I kissed his little bulbous nose."

And I thought...

..:: WHAT THE HELLL HAVE YOU DONE TO MURTAGH! ::..

Hurriedly, I rushed back to your notes, and saw that Murty's chappie is the next one... but the anxiety mixed with relief was as potent and debilitating as any spell Angela could come up with.

The chapter was great fun and contrary to my gentlemanly raising I LMAO when Murtagh happily watched the shameless witch {with womanly wiles} change clothes...

Can't wait till the next chappie... XD

murgela is such a cute ship

Awe... now how did Angela know the purple rock was a geode?

Murty is rather narky in this chapter... {well the earlier ones too} LMAO

I had forgotten completely that Elva was with the group. XD

This is great!

Your personification of Murtagh is... strange? But interesting, all the same. I'm getting quite fond of this fanfic. :)

This is good! I had never thought of them before, but they do kind of fit together. A cute scene, though there were points where I wasn't sure who was talking. And you may want to modify the beginning, considering that you began by saying that he was stretched out and then that he was to be tried. I thought he was on a stretching rack or something, not suntanning on a rock.

Good POV. Quirky, but not foolish.

Excellent. I love love LOVE your Angela. I never thought of them together before, but now that I've seen it I rather like the idea. Maybe I just need to expand my music taste, but I've never heard of any of these songs. I intend to look them up now, but next time could you use something a little more mainstream?

I re-read my review and it sounded really negative. That wasn't my intention. The chapter was amusing though the third one is my favorite. I can just imagine a pink haired Murtagh and a silver Thorn. Murtagh is probably wondering what exactly he has gotten himself into. LOL

{It was only the "Rug" song that I didn't really like, though I did get the "bad hair day" connection. ;)

Your story is always lots of fun.

xD Awesome! That was funny. I would've given him aquamarine hair myself. Good chapter. I always pictured Thorn as more of a prankster smart mouth as well.

UPDATE SOON!

Well, that was the first Owl City song that I really didn't really like loads.

In fact I thought "UgnnNo Thanks..."

Having shared that, I must say that in some bizarre nauseous way, this song is a great fit with this fic. XD {well... this technicolor chapter anyways.} XD

Very interesting idea. I look forward to the next chapter. _

*Hugs helvengurl and swings her around in a circle.*

This is so bizarre, only last night I looked that song up and heard it for the first time and put it on my favorites. You have hooked me on Owl City XD

Anyways, I loved it.

Though I think if you are going to apologize to Thorn, it should be for not giving him any lines. Granted he is way cooler than a "old maroon hot air balloon" but as that is probably the coolest thing we have on the planet to use as a comparison, I think he'll be alright with it.

And though Elva says little she always is spot on. XD