The only thing I can think of was his reactions and true feelings on the way he was reacting. I love it already. Great job.

its sad and heartbreaking! (..but i like it!..

good point!

the end, page 71.

i was also intrigued with whatever he was SUFFERING throughout that whole mess.

bella was like dumbfounded... she was having a hard time on everything she was hearing that's why his words didn't 'register' much. she was incapable of thinking through the numbness.

Aw, this is so sweet :) are you gonna write anymore? Although, that IS a great place to finish...

Hahah i cant decide! Anyway, this is faab and sad but cool 3 Team Edward? Lol x im Team Switzerland coz Taylor Launter is too fitt 3 keep up the good work l!

aw so sad. i like what you did and if i were stephenie meyer HUNDREDS of people would have hit jacob for kissing Bella in eclipse ;)

Wow. That was amazing. Are you sure your not Stephine Meyer? You sound like her. You have his charcter is just as I would have pictured it. It made sense, it flowed well. I was wondering if you were going to do any thing else from his POV?

Just WOW!

OMG! Bella I want to hug and Edward I want to knock you over the head... I loved this...

JENNIFER

wow, i didn't ever notice that.

O I feel silly now lol

written well

It was so good, I start to crye.

I dnt notice anything new

You did a really good job. I have read the start of Midnight Sun that S.M. has up on her web site and your writing is like her. Hope to see more from you. And one of the things I think you are talking about not mentions is how the other Cullens acted to Edward wanting to leave Bella.

i think another important part of new moon is what exactly edward is thinking when he goes to volterra. not sure if it has been done before, but i really like your style of writing so it would be brilliant for you to write!

I'm actually heartbroken. You captured edward's "way of thinking" perfectly. nicely done. really.

:'( *sniff*