this has a gud plot..

:) its spelled Adieu lol and please update this soon!

That was awesome! You should totally make a sequel!

Would this be continued? Because it wasn't a good way to end it because now I want more...

WHAT ALLEN COMMITTED SUICIDE!?

interesting story :D

you should write a sequel maybe

allen was dead already but came back to life

Is Allen already dead? -sobs-

WOO that was interesting

I simply LOVED this one ;-; it brought tears to my eyes

its just a great story

You need make an sequel for this!

Its awsome!

I LOVE IT! PLEASE WRITE MORE!

I think this is pretty good, although maybe it coul have been more...emotional?

Anyways, is that all? I don't mind it being a one-shot but I think it has potential to be something longer.

I didn't quite get the ending...did everyone see Allen or only Lavi? It was pretty confusing, so maybe you should work out that part again.

And I also recommend you to leave out phrases that state you're unsure how to spell certain words. It makes you seem incompetent and not serious as an author...it would be better to simply look the word up in a vocabulary instead of possibly writing it wrong.

Nice idea for the storyline in general :D

this is a great story bt... IS ALLEN DEAD? O.O? o.o;