This story dates back to one of the first Oddworld fics, and yet its amazing.

(In background) If only there was a REAL Mox.

...It would attack us.

(In background) I'd just on its back and rip its wing things off.

It's harder then it sounds.

(In background) I can take a challenge. *smirks*

If you're sure. Anyway, I wish I could see more... But since the fic dates back to 2002, I doubt you'll update again. I just wish that the 'rule' didn't exist...

(In background) We've seen it happen multiple times. Its the code of the fiction.

I can only plea for another chapter, beg. It may sound weird but its worth a try isn't it? Your tenth review on 2010. I can almost guarantee that you'll get new reviewers, more fans, more everything if you upload a new chapter... I will personally keep a hawk eye on the fic if you're willing to write more. Please think about it...

Great Story mate.

Get another Chapter coming!

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~Dan

WHEE ME LIKEY! Okay I luve the fact that the glukkon has a soft sensitive side. A plus for de ladies.

Now the slig, i'm a sucker for the evil type, so he's my fav. I hope you do more chapters on this story. I look forward to it.

I like this one a lot, to say the least. You create interesting characters and paint a very good picture with words. Your tenses waver a little, though - sometimes they're past and sometimes they're present. That can disrupt the flow a story has, but that's my only criticism.

Okay, I can't help but like the Executioner. I'm a sucker for the ruthless and evil type... Fine, I liked all the bad guys in the games. Can't help it. They're so bloody well wicked!

Hell, I'm glad someone's got an Oddworld fic this damn good up. Man, you gotta write more really soon on this bloody thing or I'm gonna kill ya. I can picture all of this happening. I really like this fic. Continue it soon and I can't believe you don't have hardly any comments. *grumbles something about people being bloody idiots for not commenting on this*

Daaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaamn. Good story. I'm gonna finish it before I go to bed. But I have a question:

Was a mox in Munch's Oddesyee or something you made up? Sounds wicked! 8)

I'll review all the chapters when I wake up or something. Til then. *bows and disappears*

Oh! I can't believe you don't have a ton of reviews. This is, after all, a story that deserves them.

Geh. Gritty.

But very interesting. write more, please!

Love it. Its one of the best and most original storys I'v ever read.

Wow. I liked this lots. All of the characters are interesting and I'm really looking forward to more. Also the Mox is great, and I'm curious to see where you're going with the three Mudokons. Congradulations on writing the first good story for this category. I can't believe no one else has left you a nice review yet.