so far we've seen peach curb stomp ganondorf, peach curb stomp snake, samus convince pikachu to curb stomp snake, zelda curbstomp fox and shiek curbstomp olimar. with the symbol of femininity on the landmaster, no less. isn't shiek trying to hide the fact that she's zelda by playing boy?

what i'm saying is, this is reading like fetishism of female empowerment.

Pit: Why does life hate me?!

R.O.B.: Perhaps because a majority of female Brawl fans wish to pair you with other males?

Pit: What...?

Me: *proceeds to die at the interaction

Awww, this was a cute one. I really love how Zelda is so enamored by Wolf's Tank and how proud he is to show it off. I also think it's very sweet that he chooses his words carefully when trying to answer Zelda's questions, at one point even getting carried away by technical details, and then realizing Zelda wouldn't quite understand before changing his explanation...almost like he's explaining something to a small child. That was actually quite adorable.

I also love how he feels a bit of disdain when she calls his tank 'beautiful' and tries his best not to lead on that it's a huge blow to his ego, even though it bothered him. LOL, that was funny. But of course, this little lesson on his tank leads to trouble. I had a feeling when Wolf led her inside and began telling her which buttons do what that something was going to go wrong...

Yikes, poor Zelda! I love how she tries to quickly get out and accidentally hits the wrong button and am glad no one got seriously hurt...save for the statue of Master Hand. But Zelda's reaction was absolutely priceless! It's too funny how she laughs, obviously full of adrenaline. And Wolf's response was great, though I'm a tad confused about that last line. I think it means they're going to blame the statue getting ruined on Fox, but I can't be positive.

Though your dialogue is excellent, you write some of your dialogue tags incorrectly. You'll see corrections below.

Overall, this was a great story, though. Well done! :)

SPAG/suggestions:

"How doe's it work?”-”How does it work?”

"Yep, a right beauty she is." Wolf replied,-"Yep, a right beauty she is," Wolf replied,

Zelda cats an amazed glance at him.-Zelda cast an amazed glance at him.

It's just an it." Wolf hastily said.-It's just an it," Wolf hastily said.

Instead, she asked. "How can it fly?-Instead, she asked, "How can it fly?

"Er, I'll show you." He replied-"Er, I'll show you,” he replied

lupines help,-lupine's help,

before telling her. "Right,-before telling her, "Right,

"Zelda!" He snapped-"Zelda!" he snapped

Hi, this story was recommended at The Room forum, so I thought I'd give it a try. I have never played SSB, but I've enjoyed many stories in the fandom; I'd say I'm somewhat fandom blind, but I know a lot of the characters due to playing some of the games, like Mario, LoZ, etc.

Anyway, this was a but little story. As usual, Bowser is up to his old tricks kidnapping Peach, but he's not really the focus of the story, as it's Ganon who has the gall to tell Peach to stop her vacuuming. Little does he know that was a huge mistake, though, as Peach is know wilting flower. I love that she's able to intimidate Ganon and that Ganon can't even say anything back (though she's got her throat in his hands, so it'd probably be too hard to try, lol).

One interesting thing I found is that even Bowser is afraid of her, which I suppose I can understand. I mean, she is pretty scary, but then how was he able to kidnap her? Perhaps more clues lie in the story ahead, though I'm surprised Peach even agrees to clean Bowser's castle with the way she speaks to Ganon. If she's got that kind of effect on him and Bowser is scared of her, I'm shocked he doesn't clean for her or get some Goombas to do it instead.

But lol, it was rather amusing for Ganon to get his just desserts, if you will.

Though the story was short, I noticed a couple of typos:

princesses eyes-princess' (or princess's) eyes

"Listen, you." Peach hissed-"Listen, you," Peach hissed

screech of "IF I CATCH YOU OUTSIDE SAMUS' ROOM AGAIN, I MAKE YOU EAT YOUR GRENADES!"- screech of, "IF I CATCH YOU OUTSIDE SAMUS' ROOM AGAIN, I WILL MAKE YOU EAT YOUR GRENADES!"

Overall, this was a lovely little piece, and I'd be interested to read more. Well done! :)

Nice TF2 reference.

I actually haven’t played any of the Metroid series so I don’t know what happened to Samus’ parents.

See even the villains like Bowesr can have fun with the heroes without going into an all out battle! It’s nive to see a chapter of everyone just enjoying one another’s presence. Like a family.

It worries me how nonchalantly Toon Link, a kid, says, “Peach was too busy gutting Red to tell me “

I think SSBB needs an emo corner

I appear to have burst into flames

“You won’t get your bedtime hug until you give that liver back!”

Giant, one-eyed, laser spider? I’m sorry, but I’m my mind, Zelda has a pet Guardian Stalker

When bowser JRs move set is completely different in actual smash

Yeah, challenging God’s is generally ill advised

wtf did you just drop a TF2 reference in the form of yoshi pretending to be spy on fire?
good stuff boyo.