cool story, um I'm guessing this is based off of "Army Men World War: Team Assualt?" because you got Boomer correct, but I think you may have changed some of the names (unless that was the idea)

(Clapping loudly and cheering loudly)

Good. Nothing spectacular but overall it was okay. Could have used more detail but there's a reason why things like these are short.

Could improve on character's dialogue, action sequences, detail, story build-up.

Hey, ace storyline and title.

Just try to space your work out on convosations and stuff.

(I used to play Army Men II when i was like, seven ; ) )

Keep up the g00d work, bud!

The story is good. It has some action, and I like action. Work on your Grammar and Punctuation and you'll be good to go.

It was pretty good.I like these kind of update soon!

The worst thing you can say is that you "stink at summaries." Makes readers think the story will suck, too. Change the summary. Anything would be better than what you have now.

this story doesn't have much detail and you like shortened words and crap like that and no greens died and their was oviusly enemys out there and u don't tell what part of the house they were in and you don't tell us ur name,wait don't tell me ur code name was Private Hunter

strange. should do better grammer. interesting.

Pretty good if you plan to contune please do so.

There was a lot of action in the story, but the plot was unclear. It was alright, however, punctuation and paragraphing was very bad. The story was rushed and short. I don't think the soldiers would get badges of courage for one battle. The type of weapon Hunter had is a sniper rifle, not a snipe.f

Kind of short but pretty good.

Excelent work!

Maybe you looked at this section before writing this- did you notice only two other contirbutors at the time? Did this not set off some sort of warning signal? Frankly, theres only so much you can write about plastic green men, and this story says none of it. Not only are your sentences, paragraphs, and everything else as one, but even if it were seperated it would still be a crap-fest. I won't even give you an A for effort.

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