this is garbage

good

I loved it. i hope to see more soon

"Oh, that's a whole other fan fiction." Rain stared at the reader with a signature Stein grin.

This line made my day. :) You definitely need to write more! I'll see if I can fit a reference to you in my story somewhere.

Mary Sue! Oh well, other than that it was pretty good. Although, maybe you should look back at your stories. For example, you said ketchup instead of catch up. Really? Anyway, it looks promising.

I think you could go somewhere with this. You need a bit of help with your spelling/grammar; nothing too serious, just minor word misusage and a few spelling errors. And a run-on here or there.

A beta could fix that. If I may suggest one, go look at my beta profile; I'd love to help out _

Gr8 story! I have a feelin I'm going to love this so much 3

It's really good, actually. I'm just one of those OCD people who want to scream at you, "OMG, THE FREAKING SPELLING AND SOME GRAMMAR IS HORRIBLE!" But like I said, it's just 'cause I'm OCD. I really do love the plot. Kid/OC and Rag/Cro are fast becoming some of my favorite pairings! .