Great story, please update soon.

Ok well firstly i want to say the idea you had for this story was epic.

Now you asked for some tips so i will be honest. I hit a hole in the road with the story that you said you will read and review for me too. What i did to assist me in thinking of new chapter ideas was to re-write and submit every chapter, i did that to 10 long chapters so it provided me with alot of thinking time.

In you case i suggest the same particularly with the really short chapters and the first chapter. The first chapter in particular needs more then a awesome sex scene it will be what attracts people to your story, i know that i myself stop reading a story if the 1st chapter doesn't inform me of what the story is really about.

Other than this i loved the ideas you came up with, inuyasha's entrance into the story made me laugh too :D

MORE UPDATES PLEASEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!

Please put up chapter 9 soon and hurry

i love it! can't wait for more!

HAHA! that made no scence.

cute lol

I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?

Listen not to sound rude or anything but, I have a lot on my plate so don't complain about short chapters. 1. My PC keeps crashing. 2. I am in exams. 3. I get projects and homework. 4. I do cricket, tennis, athletics, volleyball and karate! So don't give me crap abot chapters being short and only having three-thousand freaking words!

great chapter:)

uh oh I think shesshomaru better interject before things get outa hand

This is getting good.

you know, its kinda depressing that you have a little over 3000 words and yet you have 6 chapters. you know what that means? Your chapters are too short and not very detailed.

hehe we got ghost sperm here..lol now I wonder what will happen next

Good question.