I love it! Great idea you came up with here!

Alright, I know it's been three years and all, but could you pleeeeeease continue this? I actually really like it, and I don't usually like this sort of stuff.

this is really really superlygood please finishes this storys update soon

I bet I thought about who started the fire for about a second. Good idea writing about the people that started the fire. I can write about the grammar mistakes, but that would be mean:)

I want to see more. what happens when she gets to Tulsa?

I really liked this. I want to find out how Laurie finds Ponyboy and the others and tells them how sorry she is. I really like that you wrote from the PoV of a charictor that was so miner in the book. Just one thing through...which kid bit Pony? I was so looking forward to that... Oh well, it was still great.

I really like this idea. I guess I never thought too hard about what started the fire.

Ooh, this looks *so* interesting! I love the idea for it. Like infinite grey said, a few errors here and there but overall it's pretty good so far.

Can't wait to see if there's an update.

~wfmw :)

''They say you only remember 1% of your entire life.''

- Wow, I never noticed knew that. I always thought one remembered so much more then 1%, but I am too lazy to research otherwise.

''Oh, don't be such a scaredy-cat, Laurie.''

- Lol, that was the big thing when we were kids, huh? Being called a scaredy-cat was the worst. Ah, those were the days.

''They'll never find out if no one tells on us(,)" she grinned in anticipation.''

- Never say never. Also, I'm pretty sure you can add a comma after 'us', and then lowercase the S on she.

''...Susie had picked me as her best friend for life.''

- I remember when my best friend picked me as her 'bffl', lol.

"Okay...(l)et's go(,)" I said, trying to keep the waver out of my voice.''

- Lowercase on the L in let's, and then a comma after 'go'.

''Why ever had I been so scared?''

- Curiosity killed the cat...

''...I wanted to watch a bigger one.''

- *sigh* Kids.

I clutched the train ticket to Tulsa tightly, as if it was my only lifesaver. In a way, that was just what it was.

- Perfect ending.

Nice job on this. You had a few comma errors, but other then that, you were pretty much good with punctuation and whatnot.

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I love the plot and you are awesome at writing! :D

You should post more :)

Friday out! :)

Great POV character! I really liked this, and I'm looking forward to reading more. What a thing to live with. The only part I would question is whether a child this age would immediately comprehend the permanence of what she had done. I only say this because I remember that when I was six years old, a family friend passed away; it took me at least a few weeks to completely realize, all at once (we were doing the Pledge of Allegiance in school at the time), that he was gone forever. And then I got all upset.

I can't wait to see how Ponyboy reacts when she shows up. This is such an interesting story :).

Liz

Aw! That was really sweet. It was such a great idea to write from the point of view of one of those children. Great job and I really hope you continue this.

A few little bits. The "*Flashback*" thing is unnecessary. You could just separate it with the three centered X's or a line. Just by the italics your readers can tell it's a flashback.

This one isn't so important, but Laurie's friend Susie has the name of the author. Susan Eloise Hinton "Susie."

Please continue this. I would love to read more.

-Writersblock

Wow - I really liked your summary, and the plotline's great.

One thing: you said Laurie was eight, but I think you wrote, "I just turned seven!" somewhere. Might wanna fix that. :)

-TNS

This is a great idea for a story and I'm really interested to see what the meeting between Pony and the girl will be like.

Nice story! I never saw a story from a stranger's POV either. I hope I can see what happens next.