love this

Gabby forgives Elizabeth way to easy. She over throw her and forced her to go with Jones and at the end she was all happy and helpfull towards. I just don't understand that

Seems interesting...

I love this story! It warmed my heart, and yet I'm sad that it is over.

This is one of my favourite Pirates of the Caribbean stories!

I loved it it was wonderful! I do however dislike the fact that he still did the things with the whores but i liked at the same time cause it just fits in with his character...thx for writing this story!

Great story. Just a note, since I'm a grammar Nazi, a new paragraph begins every time someone talks. I also recommend started a new paragraph for every new thought, not a whole paragraph for 3 or 4, since that gets quite long and dull. You'll have a lot better luck with readers if you don't pile up paragraphs that they won't want to read. Other than that, great work! .

This was a really good story. Great ending too. Overall I don't have any complaints.

This is a fantastic story! I absolutley loved it! I'm definatly adding it to my favorites :D

Well done and keep up the good work in future writing :)

Just to clearify; I never said you "don't have a talent for writing". I never said your "story is a complete failure". - Those are your words.

Learn how to deal with critique and you'll do better in life.

Cheerio.

"I know you are entitled to your own opinion, but commenting on someone elses like that is a bit brash."

Someone elses what? Story I assume? It's out there, publicly on a writing site. Anyone is entitled to express their opinion about it, and guess what - sometimes you're going to get negative critique. Like you agreed yourself, I'm entitled my opinion. I'm also entitled to express my opinion when you've displayed your work on a writing site. As long as I don't say "your story sucks, you're an idiot and you disgust me" I don't have to give a positive review.

Curiosity about what? How your story was? How good your writing is? If you've got a talent for it?

- Well, that's what I gave you an opinion on.

"You should leave other people's opinion's alone, not everyone is the same."

Uh, who's opinion did I mess with?

And I'm entitled my own opinion. I gave you some advice, on how to appeal to an audience - because if you honestly wrote only for yourself clearly you wouldn't post it online for others to read.

"That was why I wrote something for Pirates of the Caribeen"

It's "Caribbean" by the way.

How could anyone leave a review saying; "I hope you kill Elizabeth!"

Clearly you've just ripped off the movies, so why would Elizabeth die? She doesn't die in the movies, hence she wouldn't die in this story.

Seriously, I know it's called fanfiction - but you could try to be a bit original. I've already seen the movies, I know what happens. If you don't create any original plot lines how are you going to catch anyones interest?

I mean, if you look at how many reviews you've gotten, and how many reviews most of the Pirate stories on this site have gotten - maybe you'll notice that you haven't gotten many at all. Why? Because your story is the movies with one added character. A shallow character, that's not very likable and extremely predictable. She didn't even get her own lines most of the time, instead you shuffled the other characters' lines around so that she got to say them.

If you're gonna write a fanfiction, great, but don't just rip the movie off. If it has nothing more to offer than what I could get from watching the movies, plus an added annoying character and a shallow, predictable, dodgy romance between the new character and Jack - then don't. Seriously.

Make up your own story, using the characters. Start from the end of the third movie, and then head off on your own adventure. But don't just type the movies down and think you've come up with something great - a ten-year-old can type the movies down and add a sister for Will.

Seriously...

Just no.

Do again, do right, do better.

This was such a good story! It was amazing, and It is now defiantly one of my favorites. Good job :)

aw thats such a sweet ending aw

this was a great fic

it was truly amazing and i loved it

well done

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